World of School

by ladydark

Published February 13, 2006

In Poetry

The world of school is very harsh and cold
In this place, those who can handle it show
The ones who do, they must be strong and bold
Without these folks, the system cannot flow


Someone took this on, they were very tough
They were different, one though to be strong
Someone who could stand, even through the rough
But in this new place, they would not last long


They struggled hard for one specific class
A class where they might be able to learn
They fought with the school, pushing through the mass
The person almost won that class they yearn


In the end, they did not win, it was done
Someone else got the class, good, go have fun...

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xanthan gum wrote a review Review · Feb 13, 2006

kill the last two lines...rewrite them.

Someone took this on, they were very tough


The person almost won that class they yearn


both of these lines have such forced rhymes that is pained me



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