I feel your stares on my back
And honestly I feel attacked
I'm never good enough
Not pretty enough
Not skinny enough
Not smart enough
Not talented enough
Not brave enough
Not happy enough
I don't try hard enough
I know two languages
I'm bicultural
My background is colorful
But I'm not good enough
Not white enough
Not Mexican enough
Not fluent enough
Not proud enough
Not shy enough
Not confident enough
Ni soy de aquí
Ni soy de allá
I'm not accepted anywhere
You're in America now speak English
Habla español o se te olvidará
Caught between two worlds
And every single look cast my way
Feels like knives on my skin
Because we've been trained to control people
We consider it child's play
But you don't know anything
You don't know where I've been
I'm not good enough
Not pretty enough
Not skinny enough
Not smart enough
ENOUGH OF THAT
This is who I am
I was born clumsy
And confused
And indecisive
I may be dust
But I am also starlight
I am a beautiful paradox
I may not fit your standards
But I fit mine
And maybe
That's enough
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Hey there! It's ZeldaIsShiek here to review another quintessential piece of literature that made my day and win this Review Day by helping the Red Pandas stay in first place and reaching my goal of 80 reviews. I might even get to 100, if I work hard enough. I am really excited to review this amazing piece of art that you have created, and maybe add some witty humor as well. Anyway, that's enough idle chatter from me. Let's get into the review.
One complaint that I have after reading your poem is how you use the same sentence structure over and over. It's 'not [Positive trait] enough,' and it gets really repetitive. I understand that the taunts are suppose to feel repetitive and unoriginal because that's what they sound like to you, but I still think that you should change it up a little bit and make the lines more interesting.
Overall the message of this poem is incredible and I am grateful that you have shared this incredible message with the YWS community and the world. Even though you are not ____ enough for society, you are done with their taunts. You are done with everything because you are who you are and that is enough for you. Thank you for sharing.
That's all for today. Keep writing amazing literature that inspires me to read and review them, and have a great Review Day! Let's beat the Blues once and for all!
~ZeldaIsShiek
Thanks for sharing.
You very effectively describe a very annoying reality-you can't please everyone so you have to please yourself. Trying to please everyone always displeases another group. Sometimes that can prove very harmful. Oscar De La Hoya. the famous Mexican boxer and Olympic Gold Medal winner, was doing well fighting in a defensive style until he was criticized as not fighting like a true Mexican. So he shifted his style to please his fellow Mexicans and wound up losing many fights that he would probably have won otherwise.
I love the expression, "I may be dust but also starlight!" Excellent poem.
Woo, you go.
Viv here to comment. First off, congrats, your first upload and welcome. Second off, love the piece. It's real, it's relatable, and it flows well. I can't say there's anything wrong with grammatically or structure wise. So, good job. I'm sorry that this problem still continues.
Thanks for sharing,
Viv out!