Young Writers Society

"This poem captures a strong and vivid sensory experience of a summer day by the lake with family. The descriptions of the warm wind, crashing water, sand slipping between the feet, and the smell of sunscreen and lemonade create a vivid and immersive experience for the reader. The addition of the small cousin waving and urging the speaker to come down to the beach adds a sense of excitement and playfulness to the scene.

What I like most about the poem is how it captures the small details of the experience, such as the sand slipping between the feet, and how it uses sensory descriptions to create a strong sense of atmosphere and emotion.

To enhance the poem, the author could consider exploring the emotional significance of the memories with family and how they have shaped the speaker's relationship to the lake and summer vacations. Additionally, the author could experiment with the use of figurative language, such as metaphors or similes, to add depth and complexity to the sensory descriptions."

hey ! I am here for a quick review.

THE GOOD THINGS - it a simple cute poem of yours, which showed us the imagery of a nostalgic summer that we all have experienced.

= "long with the wind came a smell.

I only knew from summer vacation.

A combination of sunscreen,

take-out food,

and heavily sweetened Lemonade."

the description in these lines is simple but nicely done, I don't think there is anything wrong to point out,

though, I would suggest you try developing your poetry skills by using poetic device and rhymes, your poem is nice but a little to straightforward, I am not saying that there is anything wrong with straightforward writing. there are many poets who do use simple writing but it's just my suggestion that you try using metaphor, simile, rhymes these types of things kind of level up your poem, I always write first draft in very simple language and then little by little I try to develop it, though it's your decision in the end.

I enjoyed reading and reviewing this poem,
keep writing!

Hello there! This is Ina a.k.a loveissourgrapes and I am here to give you a quick comment/review for your very cute, expressive poem. Anyways, let's get into it (yuh).

I saw the title and I felt refreshed 'Summer Vacation'. The starting shows simple thoughts from the person's point of view and the atmosphere they are surrounded by. The description of the cousins building sandcastles, and the shallow water felt like freshly squeezed lemon-lime juice in my mouth. The mentions of sunscreen, take-out food, and lemonade felt nostalgic. The brightness and excitement are very vivid in these lines:

I threw on my swimsuit.

and raced down the hall.

As soon as I stepped outside,

the sun beat down on me,

turning my skin light pink.

Descriptions of what happened to you once you got out of the shelter and the detail of your skin turning pink because of how hot the sun was. The last few lines were good ending lines. The summer reminds you of those old days were you were young and you got used to it once you get older and older. It is very nostalgic too with the mention of remembering your family by feeling the sunshine on my skin and the smell of the summer breeze. Overall, this is a good one, nice work. Keep it up hihi. Have a good day too.

Hi there! @Thediffident here to review your piece:
This was such a nice poem! When I read it the first time, the poem seemed simple and sweet but the second read took me on a journey of finding several interpretations to your piece making it an extremely interesting read. Furthermore, the words you used were simple and to the point and there weren't any major grammatical issues either. Great work!

I ran onto the beach,

sand slipping between my sandals and my feet,

which always used to bother me when I was younger,

but as I got older has grown to comfort me,

reminding me of special memories with my family.

My smallest cousin looked up and waved at me,

urging me to come down to the beach.