Young Writers Society

This poem has a true meaning to it, words can leave a knife in the back or a blanket on your back, they can be warm or cold, they can be cruel or kind, they can be worthless or meaningful, words have a power no matter the cost, lives have been taken from a simple insult, lives have been lifted from a simple kind sentence, they have never been powerless but they can drain a person of power.

This was quite a fun poem! Especially with some of the word plays that you incorporated throughout the poem by changing just a single word / letter you really illustrated your point of words having power and it created an interesting fun reading experience. Well done!

I think the playfulness of the word repetition was the biggest strength of this piece - and the message was an important one too. I thought the message of the poem was that words can be very important and can make a big difference with just slight changes, so use words carefully so that they make the intended impact.

A few places I think could be improved:

I think the sentence length could be varied a bit more - right now it's heavy on the very short sentences which made the poem feel a bit un-varied and unchanging throughout. I also think that the final portion may have more impact if you left the ellipses out. The problem with ellipses is that they can be used as a dramatic .... pause... but they can also be used to indicate hesitation, as well as absence, or confusion so until a reader gets to the ... following part of the sentence they're usually not sure whether it's hesitation or drama - which makes the ellipses kind of lose its punch and act as a distraction to the message.

Overall I think the flow was pretty good especially with the heavy use of rhyming which in this case played right into the meaning of the poem. Well done! I hope you continue to share more poetry.

alliyah

well done on this one! my favorite line has to be "A sea of dark, a sea of light.

A sea of flight, a sea of fight." the topic is a very understandable one for all readers and u made good decisions on what words to use to describe it! it shows u do know the power of words, lol. one thing that stood out to me is that there is some sort of a rhyme scheme; however, it isn't constant. i think one thing that would elevate this writing is keeping a flow of rhymes!!

keep writing!!

I love the rhymes in your poem, I think it helps the natural flow of your work. I think it ios a nice universal topic that everyone can relate to because it is a daily occurrence. I really enjoyed reading your poem. The only note that I may have is that I'd love to see you dig a bit deeper into imagery so that I can see in my mind what you are saying. I know that would be kinda hard to do with this topic but I eagerly await your next poem.

Wow, this poem is really nice. I like how you described words into many things and how words can be very powerful and impactful to the people you talk to. My favorite lines were:

"They can be positive
and negative."

This line shows people to be careful of what they hear and speak of.

And
"Their power is extreme.
It can enlighten you with a dream."

This line reminds me of my mom. She tells me a lot words and words everyday and she said some words that brought me hear to this site. Which I am very proud of.
Over all, this was enjoyable and refreshing to read. Keep it up!