Turn around,
Stay a little longer.
Walk with me,
But know this won't be our last walk together.
I am forgetting your face,
Though I remember your words.
You said you'd kiss my wounds
Till I became stardust.
But I can see you leaving,
Going far, far away.
I believe you will come back
I only hope it's not too late.
So do me a favour,
Kiss my wounds again.
Because I feel so heavy,
Oh, I feel so afraid.
Now, won't you turn around,
Stay a little longer.
Walk with me,
Knowing this won't be our last walk together.
July 12, 2026
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A good in-depth poem nicely captures the incredibly hard process of mouring the death of someone you love so dearly. I like that you didn't litteraly mention someone dying so that the reader has to fill that in themselves. The poem being a bit vague makes it easier for the reader to apply this poem to their own live and loss of a person they once got to love
Thank you so much!
Hello! This is a great poem, but I do have one critique.
In the last stanza, you use repetitive writing to highlight the narrator's desperation. While it works, the poem might be a bit stronger if you used this last stanza to show a small shift in reality. Is the narrator really walking away, or is it just in their mind?
Overall, great poem. This was a very emotional and moving poem that really captured the feeling of loss. Keep up the good work!
Thank you, have a good night/day, and be safe!
I do get your point, and think about this before writing my next poem.
I appreciate your response.
Thank you!