Celeste,
Tell me who you are.
Don't say a lover,
With a silken heart.
Celeste,
Tell me about your dreams.
Don't say being the nicest person,
Anyone has ever seen.
Celeste,
Let me tell you something.
That is not who you are,
And not who you want to be.
Celeste,
You want to be brave,
You want to be smart.
You want to be whimsical by heart.
Celeste,
Not everyone is a lover,
Not every one has a silken heart.
No one sees the world with such a colour.
Celeste,
Let us try again.
Tell me about your dreams,
And tell me who you are.
June 9, 2026
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This is lovely! I want to echo that the refrain is really, really working. It makes the poem feel so intimate and tender. The conversational tone adds to that effect, too. I love the first and last stanzas - they're a real high point. The ending in particular feels perfectly placed.
Your wording here is a little clunky! 'anyone has ever seen' feels like padding, and I don't know if niceness is a thing one sees so much as experiences.
Should be 'everyone'! Also - I love the recurring motif of a silken heart. It's a really beautiful image. It makes me think of somebody who has dedicated so much time and effort to making themselves palatable that they can't just be (i.e. a heart made of silk may look and feel beautiful but it's not going to be very good at actually pumping blood around your body)!
Another slightly clunky line - although this one is a bit more borderline. I can't quite decide if I like it or not!
I would like to encourage you to dig a bit deeper into what you're writing about! This poem works well as is, but I think with some editing and sharpening it could be a real gut punch, y'know?
Overall: fab work, keep writing!
Hi. This is a wonderful poem. I'm a big fan of refrains, and the beginning of each stanza with "Celeste," works so well here. I imagine it's referring to a person's name, and not the instrument; the comma there is so subtle but I also think it adds so much to this refrain, it makes it sound as if you are grabbing the arm of someone, to softly grab their attention. The name "Celeste" itself sounds so beautiful, so angelic and crystally and elegant.
I wonder what this poem is really about. From the image you have given, perhaps it is you speaking to yourself, speaking to the mirror, literally a self reflection. The chromey image of the mirror fits with a name such as Celeste very well in that case. I love the way the narrator kills these romantised ideas that Celeste has about herself. About being a lover with a silk heart and a dreamer of 'being nice' and all these soft and wondrous ideas. Perhaps it is about facing the self, and the mirage of one's own character and identity. I love that it leaves it open ended
Essentially saying, tell me who you actually are, flaws and all. Don't wear this facade Celeste.
This was a lovely read, I see you are new here and so I am very excited to read what you write next! Thank you!
You are right, I did write it as a conversation across time.
Thank you for your review<3
This is some good stuff, man.
Thank youu<33