“Is this what I’ve been waiting my whole damn life for? Just to see a pile of irradiated sand?”
“Sorry it’s not up to your imaginary standards, Cutler,” the paladin smiled, knocking him on the shoulder, “I believe pre-War Boston was much cleaner all those two hundred years ago.”
“Still… look at this. The goddamn sea! Come on. Let’s check out the shop.” He darted off immediately, holding his satchel close to his side. Its contents jangled, the tell-tale sign of a bag full of junk, and the tip of a laser rifle started to peek out. A habit that never really went away, even a decade later.
The door creaked open, breaking the silence hanging over the sands. The shop was strangely well-kept; each tacky souvenir was still in perfect place, though worn by time. A pleasant respite to the empty shelves of every outlet back in the Capital Wasteland. Food, fridge magnets, even a Nuka-Cola Quantum. He could’ve listed everything on those shelves. The memory, the last time Danse saw him smile was ingrained in his memory, burnt into his psyche.
Cutler flicked a radio’s dial, and hummed as it flickered to life. Bobby Darin’s voice filled the small, rattily room with a pleasant ambience.
“My favourite.” He smiled gently.
“I know. Shame I have to hear it for the tenth time this week.” The knight scoffed from across the shop, turning to his companion with an eyebrow raised.
“As soon as we’re done here, I’ll make sure to torment you further. You’ll know every word by the time I’m done with you.” Cutler grinned contentedly to himself, breaking their eye contact to peruse the shop.
By God, I will.
Straightening out his jacket, Cutler knelt to inspect the lower shelves- magnets, colourful shot glasses, postcards. From a little wicker basket beside them, his fingers grabbed a couple vibrant bracelets, adorned with wooden charms and plastic turtles. Almost instinctively, the knight shoved them into his bag, making a fine addition to his collection of utter crap.
He was so much freer outside of the Prydwen, outside his power armour, out of that suffocating uniform. Cutler moved through the shelves with a certain grace many seemed to lack- his energy, his personality was suppressed around other soldiers. Alone with Danse, it was infectious.
“Heads up.” The paladin called, tossing him a beer from across the room. Cutler caught it, and rising from the floor, presented him with a box of snack cakes. In good condition, not squashed like he usually found the boxes in. A rare, true smile spread across Danse’s face. The two wandered outside, onto the grey sand strewn with rubbish and stones. Only steps in, Cutler set himself down a good few metres from the lapping waves and took a small butter-knife from his satchel. Almost instinctively, he popped the bottle cap off his drink, passing the makeshift opener over to the paladin.
“Cheers, Cutler.”
They grinned to the skies above them, and Cutler muttered back, “Cheers.”
The drink itself was as lukewarm as possible in Boston’s climate, but it was enough. The company was all that mattered in the moment, the bliss of utter silence save for the crackling radio still chiming a familiar melody. He smiled. Such a bright, innocent smile, somehow, after everything they had been through. He never lost the light behind his eyes. Slowly, the knight gently leant his head against Danse’s shoulder, resting wearily. The walk to the airport was long, and while lugging the inventory needed for their stay- he didn’t blame Cutler in the slightest. The gentle light of the sunset was barely keeping Danse awake, as he considered it himself. Soon, they’d have to retire back to camp. The last night they’d ever check over their power armour, whisper about stories in total darkness, the last night that shit was ever normal.
He should’ve stayed forever there, on that beach, in that memory. Never should have let him go the next morning. What a fool…
Danse wrapped one of his arms around Cutler and pressed him tight. His fist clenched along with the gesture, secure.
“Thanks for being here. Really.” He murmured, half hoping the Knight-Commander wouldn’t hear. Never did like getting soppy, and by god, Cutler loved to pick at him for being heartfelt. It wasn’t exactly in character for an officer of the Brotherhood, and Danse had often found himself suppressing every pang of emotion. Often became second nature at times… but not when he was there.
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Hey, I really liked this piece, and this is my review:
Trying out a new format, let me know if you like it! I took some inspiration from @RavenAkuma for it
1. Characters:
Danse and Cutler both have unique personalities and actions, instead of monotone, boring characters, which I thought was really well done. Another thing that I liked was how natural the dialogue felt, even further painting the picture of unique personalities.
2. Setting/Mood
I would say that post-war Boston is a pretty cool setting, with a lot of potential. I really liked how you wrote it, although I think you could’ve provided a few more details, maybe something on the silence of the city and/or how nature had begun to take over the structures. Again, up to you!
The description of the shop, on the other hand, was perfect for me. My favorite part was when you mentioned the tacky souvenirs, not just describing them but also giving the reader a bit more information about Danse’s character.
Overall, I really loved this piece and I enjoyed reading it!
Good job!
Hello! This is my review of your work!
First, I think this is really a bittersweet piece. Even after a war involving radiation, it’s very heartwarming to see that the two characters Danse and Cutler bonded through it all.
Furthermore, I think you did well displaying their personalities, and showed how they relied on each other emotionally during hard times. Like how Danse says he can truly be himself around Cutler and how Cutler’s infectious energy wasn't suppressed when alone with Danse. Your writing paints an apocalyptic fallen world, where everyday is a struggle, yet a knight and a paladin share a brief moment of peace as they drink beer on the still beach.
What could be improved?
In the last sentence of the fourth paragraph, it would be better worded as: The memory of the last time Danse saw him smile was ingrained in his mind, burned into his psyche.
There might be a few places where it got a bit confusing, perhaps making more paragraphs instead of one big one and clarifying who is speaking as they are both (he).
That concludes my review! It was quite a sweet read, keep up the good work!
I hope you have a nice day!
-thebroken021