Young Writers Society

This is something beautiful I have ever read here so far. The words were full of feelings. Made me feel. I really enjoy reading your poems. This one is one of your best workz. Keep up the writing. Got urself a fan heer

Hi hiraeth!

This is a very nice poem. I love how the words have been used here! I especially like the last part. A question that popped into my mind: Why would people just throw away your words that came straight out of your heart? Like, that's just mean. I absolutely love this poem. It grabbed my attention really well. The funny part that I thought was funny was this part:

While the paper napkin holding my heart continued flirting with the ground

And without my words, it looked so utterly lonely, so torn apart
and too tell you truth, I too was worried about my heart.

to tell you the truth

This captured my emotions. The fact people would walk all over you, forget you, and hurt you hurt me as well. When you still had hope at the end that you were valued almost made me cry. I love it and I hope you write more like this. How I would describe this poem in one word is Bittersweet. It was hopeful and sad, beautiful and tragic, good and bad. I give this 10 out of 10 stars. It literally took my breath away.

So beautiful. There is really nothing to say. I think that it was perfect - I nearly started crying. Please keep writing pieces like these.

HI, hiraeth,

First off, the title is INCREDIBLY MOVING! It drew me to want to read your poem. You used exceptional vocabulary, and your punctuation was on point! I absolutely love this poem. I also love how it relates to my life at the moment. It's so crazy! This is the 13th poem I've read that been relevant to me for the past like 2 days.

"I imagine my words floating around with other lost messages and I want to believe that someone, somewhere found the paper napkin that a stranger took my heart back home and made it their own" This part be=rings tears to my eyes. How moving those words are.

Great job!!

~Giginicole<3

Hello there hiraeth
I am Costia and I will give you a brief review and my honnest opinion on your work.

I will start by saying that this was remarkable. I believe you are very talented.
This poem was beautifly put and structured.

Your title is perfect, interesting and has the same tention with the poem itself. It is very fitting. Your vocabulary was lovely and intriguing. Your words spoke tome. It was incredibly emotional, romantic and sweet. What was surprising in this case was that, it also was truthful, brutally honnest and realistic.

I love the symbolism behind it. How we all trust different people in our lives at different times and we hope to find what we were looking for in order to preserve "our heart". How people often mistreat our feelings. You showed in what a cruel and lonely world we live in but at the same time left a an implication of hope.

For me this poem hardly needs any corrections. It is perfect as it is. If I was you, I would persuit a chance to publish it.

I know this wasn't much of a review but when I read it I felt like you really deserved the praise. I actually haven't read anything that good around here for a while if not never.

Exceptional work!
Keep writing!

Best regards
Costia