Hey! This wasa really beautiful poem and the background picture was great too. The lucidity of this poem was remarkable. Some phrases- extraordinary. You did a fantastic job!!
I was a glass of water
filled to the brim
when I fell I shattered
in pieces did I sink.
First of all, I'd like to say is that even though capitalisation is given a lot of focus, in this poem, the lack of it just gave out such a good impression. It flowed with a theme. Because to me, it looked as if the words have all become short(also due to that font) and tiny because they are constantly oppressed, resulting in their repressed state. (Please tell me this doesn't sound nonsense? Did you get my point??)
Furthermore, I loved the metaphors. The line 'when I fell I shattered' is so deep and meaningful. Relatable too.
I am a million little shards
Constellations beneath your feet
And I'm broken, but I'm sharp
And I can still make you bleed.
The words in this stanza are so well chosen. Constellations is really a miraculous word for glass. The last two lines were undoubtedly epic. It was a beautiful and vengeful ending.
I loved reading this poem.
Keep writing because you're so good at it!!
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