Something Said

My professor once told me that words like "dark" and "light" should be banned from poetry because of their constant use and staleness. Yes, the interplay with dark and light has become more than a bit of a cliche. Still... somehow, this isn't an annoying piece to read. Yes, at a glance, some of those "for"s are really awkward, and should be "of"s, but as you wrote it more than once, it obviously wasn't a mistake, so I would say that readers and reviewers should try to read into that awkwardness and find meaning in it. What you could do is to find a way to help the readers to see why you made such a word choice. If it isn't effective, it does look like a mistake. I like the paradoxical elements, yes (they are obvious so I won't point them out). Also, I like the personification of the dark and light. The poem is really vague, which is not necessarily a bad thing (though I wonder about its sense of direction). The vagueness allows each reader to draw a different meaning from what the entities of darkness and light represent.
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Adam-Clay.

Hi there! Blue here for a review.

First of all, welcome to the site. We're happy to have you. Anyone with light green names (like moi's self, as Miss Piggy would say) is a junior moderator, so you can feel free to ask us any questions.

So, I really loved your first stanza especially. Normally with poetry I would say "more descriptive imagery/more figurative language," but I think it's actually unnecessary here. You used repetition very well, and the way you changed it up in the last stanza (reversing the order of "dark" and "light" from the rest of the poem) really draws attention to the importance of those last lines.

The only thing I would suggest is in the second stanza--I know this would make it a little different from the others--but I would say change the first "for" in the second stanza to "of." The reason being that "There's something to be proud for not saying" sounds a bit awkward, as usually we would say "something to be proud of." So it would be "there's something to be proud/of not saying." I don't think the change would make the line too different from the others, and it would flow better.

That's it, though. Otherwise this was really lovely, simple but powerful. Keep it up, and once again welcome!

Blue

Hey
First of all great work( is this your first piece of work) if it is it's great so keep it up. In my opinion this is great there is basically nothing you need to change, so great work on your half. But one thing you may want to change( this is in my opinion so you don't have to listen,) You may need to break between one of the lines due to you cant read it in one breath if you get what I mean. But its easy to fix that up. But all I need to say is keep up the work.

Hey there! Purple here to give you a review! Let's get down to business.
First of all, welcome to YWS!
This is an interesting poem with imagery of light and dark, but it seemed extremely repetitive. Every single stanza you only changed a few several words and the first two seemed much different but by the next few were mostly the same. Also, to help the flow, and be grammatically correct, I would change the first of the "For"s to "Of"s.
I hope this helped. Have a nice day!
~Purple