A gunshot echoed through the lonely trees, summoning all the devils of the forest to its strange sound. A man appeared carrying his one-time prey over his shoulders as the sickly sweet smell of blood rose through the air. His long, confident stride belied the sweat dripping slowly down his face. A quiet noise rang through the forest, and he quickened his pace. His lodge came into view, and he smiled at the light shining from the window. A vile breath surrounded him as a massive jowl clamped over his torso.
The End!
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It's a good paragraph
It's a very good paragraph...
...but it's just a paragraph.
Just a paragraph. Something I had to do for English, though it would be an interested start to a longer story...
Great description.
I don't really know if you're trying to start something or if its a paragraph though. 
I don't think you need the last part. The noise receded into the depths...the story would actually do better without it!
-JC