For You

I'm just going to list off what you can improve.

-grammar

-format

-rhyme scheme (didn't look like spoken word to me)

-punctuation

- and what lechat said, some of the lines were less sophisticated than the others, it feels like you didn't proofread this at all, otherwise I feel you would have changed a lot of these lines.

Overall your point comes across fine and you have a few good lines, but It looks like a rough draft, a half finished poem. I know you can do better.

Hey,

Ok, first I am going to tell you not to take sagnik's review to heart. A poem does not HAVE to be long and it doesn't HAVE to have line spacing. Poetry is free nowadays, thank God, and we don't have to follow strict rules.

I liked the impact of this. There are some really beautiful lines which struck a chord for me as someone who has experienced love. I'm sure anyone who has also and is reading will also feel this. I really liked the lines "I ask you with inflection" and "I could wrap you up with what I feel." These are really sophisticated. However, I feel that they are coupled with less sophisticated moments, such as "I may not know much of love as you may not too." I just don't think that sounds very nice spoken aloud, it's a bit "bumpy." I think it's because they're all one syllable words. The rest of the poem flows really well and that part jolts slightly. Also, I LOVE questions in poetry, particularly in one like this which is speaking simultaneously to someone and of course, everyone.

Anyway, you can't beat a love poem. I hope to read more from you.

Great poem! I think you did a great job putting your feelings into words.

"I could wrap you up with what I feel."

I love this line! It makes me imagine something warm and soft, and I like that you kept that theme throughout that first paragraph.

"I'll give you a blanket to keep the cold from you."

This line wasn't bad, but it was weaker than the previous two lines. Maybe bring it back to you being comforting, like, 'Let me be your blanket.'

"Tell me that you'll rest your head again, even after death."

I like how simple and tender this line is.

"Although it was just a blanket to keep you from shivering."

The ending isn't too bad. I still feel like it might be more powerful if you were the blanket, so that you were the comfort. 'Although I was just the blanket to keep you from shivering.'

Great job! I really enjoyed this poem and the theme it had. Happy writing!

the blanket is enough ! hh just joking. it was a paragraph not a poem. first the line spacing is
wrong. then u specified it as poem. i was misleaden however my time is not wasted. whatever it was it was ausome. if u write poem keep it short and use deeper or double meanimmg words.
i nlike the points of bio emotional confession. thats a word i ceated. that means the point were u said that both of u will hold tje blanket closer to show her that ur heart is beating and hence lovce is active. write more and make the specifications care fully our new freind.

Oh my god!! This is my life. As living in a cold country, I do truly love my blanket.

Also Hello

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To be honest I didn't really think that there was anything wrong it was just so capturing and awesome altogether!!! Always keep writing!

Hi..
A poem about blanket! Seriously! I love it.
Although it looked like more a story to me but if you could separate your stanzas, it would seems great. It kind of sad but it warms me. Do you really felt that way? If you do, cheers then.
[Although it was just a blanket to keep you from shivering.]
You could hide the fact that it was a blanket! It would be gooder that way.

Keep writing and I hope this helped.