Franz F. Muñoz
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Technology: What would be life be without it?
What is technology? Technologies significantly affect human as well as other animal species' ability to control and adapt to their natural environments. It can also refer to the collection of such tools, including machinery, modifications, arrangements and procedures. The term can either be applied generally or to specific areas: examples include construction technology, medical technology, and information technology. Technology was the important thing that was discovered by man. They made a great contribution in our life because nowadays, technology is very useful. One of the best products of technology is gadget. This product is one of the inventions that have made a great impact to a man’s life. Without these gadgets, man’s life would be miserable. Gadgets help us in many ways to make our life more comfortable. In this case, gadget as a part of technology, assist us by communicating people, to help the students to their studies and to establish good interpersonal relationships.
Gadgets are very useful in communicating people. It helps to have an interact with one another. Nowadays, communicating is very important because it is a way to connect people. Example for this is the use of mobile phones. With the use of this, we are able to communicate simply by texting or calling. It easy for people to communicate because of mobile phones unlike the years that it was not invented. Many years ago, people feels difficulty in life and the only thing they have is the telegraph. Mobile phone is a device that can make or receive a call. It is very useful because even though how much far, it can still connect from each other, that was how powerful it is. Another example for this is the use of telephone. It is a communication device that connects people and it conducts a conduct a conversation. Telephone can be used whether it is very far from each other. There is similarity in mobile phone from the telephone. They both can make or receive a call. There is also a differences. Example, mobile phones can bring anywhere while telephone is not. It can only be used in home, office, school etc.
Gadgets are also useful for the students. Like for an example if a schoolboy has an assignment or project that he didn’t understand, he makes use a computer or laptop to search it on the internet. One of the person who is best from originating the concept of computer programming was Charles Babbage. Considered a "father of the computer’’. Babbage is credited with inventing the first mechanical computer that eventually led to more complex designs. His varied work in other fields has led him to be described as "pre-eminent" among the many polymaths of his century. A computer is a general purpose device that can be programmed to carry out a set of arithmetic or logical operations. Since a sequence of operations can be readily changed, the computer can solve more than one kind of problem. It also helps students to make their projects. It can be used also in communication. It used by chatting or video chatting. That is a very effective way to connect people that are far away from each other. Computer has many uses that make our life more comfortable.
Gadgets are used to establish good interpersonal relationships among people. It establishes a good relationship because gadgets connect people. Using gadgets help us in many ways. It also makes a convenient way in students’ studies like doing their projects. Another way is to help in their home works. Some students now are not using library because the computer has it all. But sometimes, these gadgets can affect the studies of student because of the games. It is not to play games just maximize it.
Our world today evolves in technology. Without this, our life will be suffering from difficulty. Gadgets are one of the products of technology that made a great contribute in our daily life. It can help us to communicate and to have interact with one another. Communication is an activity of conveying information through exchanging of thoughts. Gadgets can also help students. It is very useful nowadays. If you don’t have this kind of gadgets, your life will be miserable. Technology is an absolute need we cannot escape from. Let's just say, it has a very big role in most aspects of our lives. In other words, it answers most of Mankind problems. Across centuries technology evolves. The importance of technology is aiming for comfort of use in whichever form it is. It always directs for easiness in life.
Take the mobile technology for example. The faster the world is moving, the more hi-end the features are offered. Laptop gets thinner and smaller. It becomes more compact every year and offers more capabilities and top performance. It should load a lot of stuffs in a more concise shape. That is the need. Period. People should not take time to think of what should be brought over a sales presentation in the southern state since everything is already "filed" in the laptop.
Also for telephone. The need to be able to communicate anytime, anywhere, has inspired scientists to create cellular phone. And it gets smaller and smaller. And then it has more features, more games, more entertainment, and now offered more professional like having a computer in the pocket. And then from costly, it goes cheaper and better and faster and become more reliable.
Computers: Wikipedia. (1833). Retrieved from Wikipedia Web site: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Charles_Babbage
Telephone: Wikipedia. (1876). Retrieved from Wikipedia Web site: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Alexander_Graham_Bell
Mobile phones: Wikipedia. (1973). Retrieved from Wikipedeia: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Martin_Cooper_(inventor)
What is technology?: Wikipedia. (n.d.). Retrieved from Wikipedia: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Technology
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nice essay,:), your topic was so interesting
your title,"Technology: What would be life without it?",
really catches my attention.
Also, the way you point out your ideas especially when you cite your own example on how technology really helps us although, there are some minor errors. Still, it is a good article. KEEP IT UP!
its nice and simple!!! keep it up!! nice work
I like your title it catches readers attention.
I also like how do you play with your ideas and how do you answer your own questions..
Its a nice thing that you cited some examples about technology, its pretty good ..
Your definition matches with the rest of your essay and i loved how you elaborate the meaning of technology and how do you organized your topic. Though I've just seen some corrections, but overall your ideas in your essay is good .. Job well done !:)
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Technology really has a wide range.The essay you've done was great but some little corrections. But in all it is nice and interesting.
You have a point on your essay. Keep up the good work!
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Hello New User (I assume). First off, welcome to YWS! Thanks for posting some of your work and congrats on getting in the spotlight!
Technology: What would be life be without it?
Now it's time for that juicy review you've been waiting for, I assume.
What I did was insert some of the things I would say and/or omit if I wrote this. I do this by inserting my pieces with brackets. So I will talk about what I thought of the piece after I show you what I did with your first paragraph (btw, I am only going to review the first paragraph because I think if you start there, and read what I wrote, then it'll help you with the rest of your essay). Here it goes:
Heads up: You are really going to want to focus on keeping this question in mind when writing your thesis because it is the question you are supposed to be answering.
What is technology?
In this part of the paragraph, I don't think you directly say what technology is. Is it a person? Is it an idea? What is technology? When you're thinking about this, try to make the definition as simple as possible and try to refrain from being too fancy. People like me are reading your essay, and if they can't understand what you're trying to say then that is not good and you will have to change something to help them understand it.
The reason why I did all this fancy stuff to your thesis is because it's the most important part of your paper. This is what you are always going to want to refer back to. So I emboldened it, made it big, and made it colorful because I want you to see how much more important it is than your topic sentences (which are great, by the way). Oh, I also touched it up a bit. I hope you like it!
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In this part of the paragraph, you are going to want to state why technology is the most important thing discovered by man and how technology is very useful (to man).
Again, how do you know that man's life would be miserable with his gadgets? You need to explain how you know this. Is it because people use their gadgets everyday? Is it because that is what man is most dependent on these days? You are going to have to be a little more specific about this.
You will have to get back to the thesis after this. You did a good job of explaining your topic sentence, but now you are going to have to say how gadgets (for this first paragraph, cell phones) assist students with their studies and how they help to establish good interpersonal relationships with other people. Saying this, I think that this paragraph might be a little too long. It's great, but you are going to have to find some things to cut out so that you can have enough room to talk about the thesis, because after all, explaining the thesis and not the topic sentences are the most important parts of an essay and the reason why you write essays. This was a good essay; do not get discouraged by all the stuff I point out in it! They are just the things that work me and what does not work FOR ME! You do not have to take any of my advice because it is your writing.
thank you very much for all of your comments and suggestions. i will sure that it will help me a lot. actually this is my first time to wrote an essay. thank you.
YOU'RE FIRST TIME WRITING AN ESSAY?! Wow! This is really great! Good job!
I like very much how you start by defining technology. I've seen a lot of essays where the writer never took that important step, and so you're left wondering how they define it. I think it's also very interesting (and very true) how you extended it to include non-humans. While it may not be technology as we think of it, crows have been known to come up with clever contraptions to get at food, and at least one species of apes make baskets.
Your definition also matches with the rest of your essay, taking a very long-view of how technology has shaped society across centuries rather than just decades. This is also a very important perspective to hold as how society reacted to novel technologies in the past will inform us as to how society reacts in the future.
I'd remove the next to last paragraph though. Talking about laptops is too narrow and doesn't add much. Instead, you should expand more on cell-phones, which are being used by billions of people around the world.
yes thank you very much nate.
A good one. Keep it up
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First off, welcome to YWS. I hope you learn a lot of stuff here.
Technologies significantly affect human
It should be humans.
They made a great contribution in our life because nowadays, technology is very useful.
Number one, who is they? Number two, you need a semicolon or a period, but not a comma in this sentence.
It helps to have an interact with one another.
This sentence structure is wrong. It needs to be: It helps to have interaction with one another, or: It helps to interact with one another.
Either of those is correct, but the way you had it isn't.
It easy for people
Should be it is, or it's.
Many years ago, people feels difficulty in life and the only thing they have is the telegraph.
I'm completely lost about this paragraph. It is in the wrong verb tense and it shouldn't be feels. I don't get what these sentences mean either.
It is a communication device that connects people and it conducts a conduct a conversation.
Here is another line that confuses me. And you just talked about the mobile phone, so I don't really see why you need to go into the home phone as well.
I also saw a lot more problems, and I'm sorry, but I couldn't finish this. I would suggest having a friend or teacher go through this and help you read through it, and find the other problems. Now, I did like your approach; good job.
Keep it up!
Your title caught my attention. You have clearly explained your point. Very nice essay. Keep it up.
Your essay is good but it has no big ending.
Keep up the good work franz. Iam your big fan.
Nice essay
Keep it up
Nice essay!
Good choice of words and statements. Overall, good essay.
The amazing technology of connecting people even how far you are. If not for this, there will be more homesick Overseas Filipino workers. And the other gadgets make our daily communication easier and faster.
Nice one. I like your essay. Keep up the good work.
thank you. may God Bless you