Hi! I have to sat that these poems.......confused me. First of all, you have not thought of the word count at all; haiku have the 5/7/5 syllable rule. Second, some of them don't make sense to me, such as ' Visible Raindrops'. What IS it about? I didn't understand 'You're all but a sight', and ' A Watcher'' either.
In the first haiku, the sentence '' snow made my tears dried' is not correct. It should be DRY.
The haiku 'Don't pushed so hard' should be PUSH, right?
And finally, the last haiku: Last Drop of the Autumn Leaf. What do you mean by a DROP of the autumn leaf? I'm totally at sea.
Don't be disheartened; keep trying. You'll get the hang of haikus eventually! I can't write them properly yet, too.
Mysticalxx
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