Young Writers Society

Fortis-
I don't know if you remember me, I just popped back on here to see what's happening. What I haven't forgotten is your inspiring poetic style! That last line prompted a chuckle out of me. It sort of brings the reader back to the innocent tone of a letter whereas the rest of the poem deviates from that into a more engrossing, imagery-rich narrative. (Does that make sense? This isn't even a review, I'm just out of practice with commenting on any work haha).
Bravo!

Ah the flow and rhyme in this piece was fantastic and I loved the bits of humor especially in the beginning and end. Nice piece fort!

ey, am just curious and too lazy to browse about the difference between tomato and tomahto?

—riotheselcouth🍂

Hello fellow writer, FlamingPhoneix here to drop off a review for you on this lovely night, and to help get your work out the green room.

Okay let's begin.

So I only saw one small mistake, and I have a feeling it might have been a typo, so I'll show you.

tomato, tomahto, the same old things.

Hey there, fortis! I'm a little rusty on reviewing poetry, but I wanted to try my hand at reviewing your work after I saw your wall post about it.

I had a sneaking suspicion that it was a reference to Greek mythology, and a quick search on Google proved me right! I had never heard of the myth before - it was interesting being introduced to the characters in your poem and reading what it was inspired by. I love how you took a classical Greek myth and turned it into a more modern take.

I'm not entirely sure if this was your intention, but the conversation between Cyllene and Callisto reads like a conversation between a new mother and a knowing one who's already been through the experience of her children growing up. I love the words you described to use to describe the transition Arcus would undergo during his time in school. It was one of the things that stuck out to me when reading through this before the myth - as well as the comment about Halloween costumes.

After reading the myth, I love the little references you threw in - calling Zeus The Monster and Artemis the Faithless Goddess just felt right. Zeus was very much the monster of that tale, and Artemis was faithless when she didn't give Callisto a chance to tell her side of the story. It's a touch that I didn't notice until I was writing this review, and a touch that I wholeheartedly love.

The only critique I have about this poem is the lack of explanation for the myth of Callisto. It might be a good idea to either give a brief summary of or leave a link to a site that explains the myth so readers on YWS know the context of your piece - I don't think I would have enjoyed it as much if I didn't decide to google the names mentioned in the poem.

But, overall, great job with this poem! I can't wait to read more of your poetry in the future, whenever you end up posting more.