I wrote this in, like, two minutes. It's very tongue-in-cheek.
Hello!
How are you?
What's your name?
I think I know you,
Do you think the same?
What is this feeling?
It's like meeting an old friend
For the very first time
I don't know what should go here,
Sometimes it's hard to make things rhyme
Something goes here
Rousing, and moving
And now, it descends
It's soft and soothing
What is this thing we call a song?
I think it's possible
That I did something wrong…..
Yeah.
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Pup, minimalism is attractive. It's a damn hard style and even more frustrating in execution after the fact. So pup, what have you got here?
A cute conversation and a little brunch for friends. Nice, if you like thin messages. There are once again decent lines here between nonsensical jargon that thinks it's communicating soo well. But it's not, and instead it's
just making noise.
Lyrics are a process, beat, and rhythm in mainly oral aspects. No, it's not for simply written aspect
s. As a lyricist, your job is to view both the spoken and accompaniment, then view it as well in how easily it can be sung and pronounced. Plus what is the style to be sung.....etc.
You still need diction here. You still need cohesion. You need to tie questions with how it would be sung.
Hey, Dearie. To get rid of the double-spaced lines, you click edit, then scroll down a bit, choose Poem, and voila! :3 Easy.
and since only wrote this in two minutes, guess wow.
I'm going to disagree with the previous reviewers. Punctuations doesn't matter much in these kinds of lyrics. It was fast, and easy to understand. Period. I like it, dearie. And oh boy! I can't do anything like this myself.
This is my favorite line:
Oh, I don't know why. Maybe it's because I know that feeling?
CSI Jash ♥
Well this was fun to read! Very interesting, is all I think I will say. Take it as you want it
lolSo just some punctuation and wording, but great work!
I like it...in an odd sort of way. It is funny, yet serious. Fast yet, slow.
~FW~
Hahaha oh you make me laugh ;P
I thought this was very funny! I've tried to make a poem about absolutely nothing and failed miserably but I think you did great, which takes some talent XD
I laugh every time I read that. It's just so funny and clever! I love it. If I could like this eight times, then I would. But sadly, I cannot. Now for some nitpicks:
I hope I helped! :3