Young Writers Society

The beginning just killed me!
Good job,woman! (never gonna change this nicknames of yours sowwy dear)
I like this short poetry even though I am wanting it to be longer!
This will be quite the short review.I do not know why the idea of this whole work makes me laugh.I love cats,overall,though they may hate me. (ugh ugh)
The start with the lines kind of not put in order to the left or to the right..I do not know what to say about it but it really surprised me..in the good way,of course.I like it and I hope it is not only me.Your punctuation and grammar is perfect (i usually complain a lot about this so plus point for you,woman) so I can not really say something negative here and nowin this point,maybe only more deepness in the describtion.There is a bit of a repeatment in the middle parts of this work which is kinda making it odd.

Good job,woman!

The beginning just killed me!
Good job,woman! (never gonna change this nicknames of yours sowwy dear)
I like this short poetry even though I am wanting it to be longer!
This will be quite the short review.I do not know why the idea of this whole work makes me laugh.I love cats,overall,though they may hate me. (ugh ugh)
The start with the lines kind of not put in order to the left or to the right..I do not know what to say about it but it really surprised me..in the good way,of course.I like it and I hope it is not only me.Your punctuation and grammar is perfect (i usually complain a lot about this so plus point for you,woman) so I can not really say something negative here and nowin this point,maybe only more deepness in the describtion.There is a bit of a repeatment in the middle parts of this work which is kinda making it odd.

Good job,woman!

Hello, InfiniteRectangles here!

First, I would like to say that I really love cats! I have 5 of them xD I also really liked the format of your poem. It was fun and creative (and I love when poets experiment a little. Structured stanzas all the time get boring!)

That being said, I was left with several questions at the end that I feel would make your poem stronger if they were addressed/clarified earlier in the poem, so the reader isn't so confused at the end (although my confusion could also just be a result of my own ignorance.) Anyway, I don't really understand why the cat is imaginary, and why you would have to give away an imaginary cat. Is this a metaphor for something?

Also, as Rydia has already pointed out, the middle gets a bit repetitive and makes the reader start to lose interest. If a poem is going to have repetition, it needs to be placed in a way that keeps the reader's attention throughout.

It seems that everything else has already been addressed, so I won't iterate them. I don't want to sound like a broken record, after all. Overall, your poem was really cute, and the format was fun, but your delivery could use slight improvement. Give the kitty some more kitty-like characteristics. Show, don't tell!

Alrighty. That's all I have for you. Keep writing and have a wonderful day/night!

Hello! Shape poetry - I love how this looks like a cat staring at you and it's a great first impression to have of the poem. It also goes well with the title so nice work there.

Specifics

1. Try to avoid using 'just' unless you're trying to create a hesitant effect. It's one of those filler words which has a habit of slowing down poetry or creating a sense of uncertainty. It's nice to use when you're being ironic or building a vulnerable persona but in a fun, spirited poem it could be replaced with almost any adjective to make a stronger line. Instead of 'Just watching my every move' it could be:

slow watching my every move
slyly watching my every move
alertly watching my every move

Any of these describe the action of the cat better and add a little more depth to the writing.

2.

You attempt to pretend

That you don’t care about me!

But I know that you do,

First off, I loved this. This was a really fun poem and I even like cats (two of them at home ) and I actually thought that the format you went with added to the overall vibe. Don't wanna do too much restating of what hailpanda3 said, but the repetition was a nice touch as well, kinda made the whole thing even more lighthearted to me and just fun to read!

On another note, I hope you can get a cat someday XD

Hai there!
It's hailpanda3~

Okay so I don't write poetry so I shall give you a review from the reader's side. Like if you know what I mean.

Okay so I'll start with complaints/dislikes.

This is gonna be hard because I liked your piece so much...
Maybe the format? I was kinda confused on it when I first read it but then I understood how it made your poem cool. (I guess thats not really a dislike but...)
It does have emotion at the end but throughout the poem I just didn't really feel it.
Uh... I just skip to the likes :3

Okay now the likes!

This poem absolutely shows a cat personality. (I have 2)
It is a repetitive-type of a poem since you repeat a bunch of stuff which makes it a little more simple for readers.
I like at the end how it was only an imaginary cat so it makes you wonder...
Anyway i'm not that great at poetry again, so I can't do good reviews at all (I just like cats)

Okay so I have a question.
You had that cool format at the start but just kinda stopped in the middle. Why? (so I know nothing but i'm just wondering)

Okay bye now..........
Sorry for the bad review........
I talk too much.........
Bye then~
Nice work!!!!