hello! welcome to yws btw!okay so i already commented, but i figured i'd leave a review because WOW this poem hit me really hard. i think it's gonna stick with me for a while.
i press my fingers into peony petals feeling their density, cold, even in summer
you feel like the sun, you feel like warm water in kiddie pools & grass on bare feet, messy, muddy, just like the color of your eyes
i find it second nature like bike riding until you fall for the first time
i think about how everything is so beautiful
i wake up every morning like i've just been reborn
Hiya! I'm Orabella here with a short review.Welcome to Young Writers Society! We hope your stay is pleasant among the towers of stories and the never-ending forum files filled with young writers across the globe.I don't think I've read a poem (or story for that matter) that has an & symbol. And now I'm wondering why not because it's really cool! Rather than saying "and", you can say & and it somehow means the same thing! Incredible. It's interesting that you use that symbol, also that you didn't use any capitals. Same with the title; it's interesting that all the words are squished together. I understand that in a lot of poems, that is something done a lot, but I never understood why. Why do some poets choose not to use capital letters? Why do they use symbols in their text? Why don't others do that too? What is the meaning behind it all? (You don't have to answer any of that, but if you happen to know, I'd love if you could share that with me.)I really like the first verse because of the imagery. I can perfectly imagine the summer setting with the fragrant flowers, and feel their touch on my own skin. I love when poems can create those pictures like that.I love the reminiscent feeling of this; the way the character is remembering the past is told in such a thoughtful and it just gives me good feelings.Thank you for writing and sharing this, and I'd love to see more of your work. Never forget to keep writing!
I absolutely loved your poem. The part of this poem that spoke the most to me was "nostalgia tastes sweet but its hard to wash off of your hands."
Not a review, just a comment, I really enjoy and love this poem and all the components to it. <3
"i wake up every morning like i've just been reborn" WOW that is def a line that's gonna be sticking with me for a while oh my
Hello, and welcome to the Young Writers Society! I hope you're having a good day thus far. The title of this piece caught my attention. I like the way you forwent the common conventions of grammar and capitalization, both there and all throughout the piece. It's always fun to see! But what I absolutely adored about this poem was your evocative language. Your line about the other person's eyes was my favorite, but I also really liked the bit just before that-
you feel like the sun, you feel like warm water in kiddie pools
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