I wrote this in a fit of silliness. Dedicated to Snoink and the usergroup Snoink's Evil Minions.
TEAR IT APART. Beat it like there's candy in the center 
We Are
We are warriors with
marshmallow armor and
black licorice boots
A field of stuffed animals poses
an easy target
seams splitting,
buttons, bits and pieces
of synthetic flesh
and cotton carnage
We are merciless
a toast to Mr. Teddy
whose black diamond eyes
used to sparkle with such enviable
joy, mischief and life
now reservoirs of misery
at the bottom of a ditch
no stone to grace his grave
We are monsters
chaos and hatred
sleep-over often
snuggling together in
the black den of our hearts
Like a storm of cherry gum-drops
we pelt our adversaries
ruthlessly, incessantly
Until
They
Fall
We are evil
like a liter of newly born
kittens we emerge
bloodthirsty
licking our paws in
vicious
feline
anticipation
sinking our claws into anything
that stands in our way
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That was very cute and sort of funny too. Well usually. The last para was scary. And I really liked the contrast in these two paras:
We are monsters
chaos and hatred
sleep-over often
snuggling together in
the black den of our hearts
Awwwww....
Like a storm of cherry gum-drops
we pelt our adversaries
ruthlessly, incessantly
Until
They
Fall
More awwwww....
Dude, now I really want candy.
Well, I loved this! It's taken a poetic (and extremely scary) slant on the evil usergroup which I know and love. <3
But, seriously, did you have to make the teddy so scary? I have a wild imagination, you know.
But, yeah, it's very beautiful. Lovely work. *sniff*
~Amy
Such a cool poem!
Awesome! I really liked how you put together this poem! One of a kind!
*keep that imagination expanding**
-ValerieMichelle
I want the candy. So bad.
xD But what more can I say that hasn't been said about this poem?
Candy armor. Already genius.
-Shina
Ha ha, I just absolutely adore this poem!
Favorite line ever!
I imagined everyone in our group wearing marshmallow armor and black licorice boots! Wow, you've got great potential as a poet!! This is totally getting a star!!
Hey again Empress
It seems you like my reviews. This makes me happy 
I'm guessing you want me to give you punctuation errors as well? Whatever, if you don't then just ignore them.
This makes me think of cute, fat, candy teddy bears. I don't know if that's a bad thing, but I love it
But there should be a period at the end of boots.
This line should start with a capital letter because it's a new sentence. And I'm pretty sure there should be a semicolon after target.
Great imagery and word usage here
I like this line, and there's nothing wrong with it. I was just thinking that it would sound just as good if you said cotton carnage rather than the carnage of cotton. Either way it's good, just thought I'd point that out in case you agreed.
There should be a period after this line and the next should start with a capital letter.
Another period here and the next line must also start with a capital.
Comma after now. Great line, by the way.
Amazing line... You really are very good.
Period after monsters and the next line starts with a capital.
I don't understand why you're comparing a black den of a heart to a storm of cherry gum-drops? Maybe it's an inside joke I don't understand, but the poem would sound just as good without the second line.
Start this line with a capital
Good adverbs
For this one I just put the punctuation corrections in red.
You know what, I've just done the same here. It seems easier.
I liked this poem a lot. I couldn't tell if by the lack of punctuation it's meant to be that way? (As I said I know nothing about lyrical poetry) But I corrected that anyway, if it's relevant.
You use a great vocabulary and this is a greatly enjoyable poem. You really do have an amazing talent, and I hope you plan on continuing
Keep that pen rolling,
~^~Xirenia~^~
Awww.... thanks Snoink, Moriah.
It's thanks to Snoink's Evil Minions that I decided to try my hand at poetry... and now I love it!
And if you read this, any strangers who don't know what Snoink's Evil Minion's are-- possibly the best usergroup in the universe of yws. We revel in our evilness (see poem above to get an idea)
Think about joining us
XD
This made my day.
Anyway, my favorite stanza was the last one. You don't know this, but the precursor to the evil minions was SPEW... and we used to joke that if you didn't review, we would eat cute and cuddly kittens. So for our mascot, we used to have this evil kitten picture... and yeah, you totally didn't need to know this, but it amuses me greatly!
A star for you!
I love it! It not only makes me want to practice my pyschotic laughter, but it also makes me want to hit a pinata full of sugary goodness. My only real critique would be these two stanzas:
I think you should make with and now part of another sentence, instead of having them off on their own. It kind of disrupted the flow when I was reading it. But it works in the third stanza.
Great imagery by the way! I love the line about carnage of cotton. Epic.