Smile at the monsters, dear.
Offer them some tea.
Ask them if they will come out
to play a game with thee.
Smile at the monsters, dear.
do not scream or shout.
the worst thing you can do
is not to let them out.
Smile at the monsters, dear.
Smile until they leave.
because they live off of your fear,
that is what they need.
Smile at the monsters, dear.
Show them who you are.
Remind yourself, without them,
you will travel far.
Smile at the monsters, dear.
I know you may fret.
Because the scariest monsters that exist
are the ones you haven't met yet.
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emoplushhhhh!
That's all I have to say really XD
I loffle this with all the fluffy pieces of my heart
sorry I'm not much of a help..
LOFFLES!
-qaralynn-
Ahaha, lovely. Monsters, what a wonderful topic. However, I sense that these aren't fairytale monsters that you're talking about, which makes it all the better (being as that's what most people are used to).
I like how you started every line the same, giving each stanza the same feel to it. Who though, is talking? A father, brother, sister, mother?
This stanza was probably the most interesting of the lot. "Offer them some tea"? Hmm, nicely written.
I don't understand this one. First the narrator is saying not to express the fear, then saying that the worst they to do is bottle it in? I'm not sure.. Something else though, you should capitalize the words in the start of each line.
I feel that this part is one of the most thought out of the whole poem, reminding us to be strong in the face of fear and we'll overcome it, killing it.
I love how this stanza emphasizes being yourself and living your life, not controlled by the monsters.
I don't know why, but it seems like this is the first stanza that popped into your head. Whether that's right or not aside, what do you mean by the last two lines?
Overall, this poem was very nice to read. Enticing and inspiring, to say the least. Keep it up.
--Brandon
xoxo
Oh wow, I loved this. I totally loved this. Very, very well written, and it reminds me of nursery rhymes. I love it! I also love how you can rhyme so fluently and keep the rhythm. Very well done. :3 I'm left with no critique whatsoever.
Keep it up!
Wow this is pretty amazing. I don't read much poetry but this seemed great, it's almost like a nursery rhyme. I wish I had some genuine criticism but I can't really think of anything. I particularly love the last few lines:
Nice work, you made this strict fiction junkie care about poetry
JP