16+ Language

txting with girlfriend

Warning: This work has been rated 16+ for language.

This so random. The italic part is the guy and the non-italic one is the girl. Let it rip. xD

Btw I wanted it to have line breaks and stanzas but damn the editor. x( ;(

Asleep?

Nooo.

So whats up?

Nothing much.

Just dancing with you.

And calling you boo.

I be calling you my love.

And I’d give you a beautiful dove.

Why dove?

It rhymes with love that’s why.

Haha! xD

Let’s do cha-cha!!

But I can’t dance.

I’ll teach you,

you are intelligent,

you will learn it in a glance.

I can’t move.

But, I got the grove!

Slow dancing then, only.

But it should be done boldly.

Soft and sweet romance.

And I’ll try to kiss you when I get a chance. :D

Ok, you can kiss me all you want.

And then I’ll flaunt.

Haha! Flaunt what?

That your lips tasted like butt? :/ (that’s doesn't sound right)

Or cashew nut? xD (yes, that’s more like it)

What? You eat butt now?

No I just eat you. (no pun intended)

Because you look wow!

Its late. Aren't you sleepy?

Let's get creepy. :D

What? You want me to throw bugs at you?

Leave out the bugs,

I'll just make do with you.

Okay so, what do you want to do?

Smell your shampoo. xD

Awww!!

And?

Kiss your hand.

I have pretty slender fingers, btw.

Damn, now how am I supposed to rhyme btw?

It doesn't need to rhyme :P

You be my babe.

And you are the one that I would never trade.

I’m here.

You don’t have to trade anything.

I will hug you like a bear.

You be my everything.

And I will bear hug you too.

My beautiful and lovely boo. :P

I'm going to make red velvet cake tomorrow.

What about smart, brilliant and extremely humorous?

Highest mountain in Africa is Kilimanjaro.

It has volcano numerous. xD

I'm aware of these stuffs.

Apparently they get stuck in my head from the random places I read them.

Like the panda bear that pretended to be pregnant to get more food.

Your brain is a gem.

And, that panda should be sued.

I read the title somewhere that it was a fake.

Possibly BBC I think.

I would so like something to drink.

What would you like to drink?

Something with the color pink.

Are you going gay?

That is so stereotypical to say.

But right stereotypical.

Its ok. I was just poking fun at you. :P

Don't poke fun at me I know kung fu.

It’s time to sleep. Are you in bed?

No I am in my love shed. ;)

Bed?

Love shed.

Now it's time for you to sleep.

Let's get into lovey dovey shit knee deep.

Hugs you. It's time for bed.

Y u do dis spoderman?

Cause its late.

Good night.

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miley
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miley wrote a review · Fri Sep 12, 2014 4:58 am

Good job! I really felt being a part of it. The poem was simple yet so involving. Just like it’s said “simplicity does it best”.
But there are a few things that went down and low
The couple is cute but after a while they get quite monotonous. This of course decreases the interest of the reader.
Secondly the poem got kind of too long to maintain, in fact my eyes quite drooling.
Rest it’s just fine. So keep up the good work!
Keep dreaming and keep writing!!!

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Fatima
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Love the girl's part. She is so awesome :O.

Keep writing! loved it :3.

Yes she is. :P

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elysian
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elysian wrote a review · Mon Sep 08, 2014 9:36 pm

Hey Kam here to review!

This is so cute! A little confusing but cute ;) I love how the boy was being goofy and the girl was telling him it's time to go to bed, added something new! I first saw that this was a texting convo. between a couple and I was like "oh great." but this was actually pretty cool. After A while I kind of got bored though, so maybe shorten it a little bit?

Keep writing! :)

-Kamryn

This was absolutely adorable. It actually gave me a couple cavities from how sweet it was. I love how playful the boyfriend is, trying to rhyme with everything she says. I also like that you didn't make it too grammatically correct, but you also didn't throw grammar out the window completely. Honestly, if that man was my boyfriend, I can't even tell you what would be going on :D Great job!!!

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HiImAndy
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This was the cutest freaking thing I've ever seen. My boyfriend isn't random with me like that unless we're in person or something, so like this is the greatest. Is this a real conversation or did you just come up with it? I just can't help how girly this made me feel on the inside. It was so adorable! :) Since this was a texting conversation there shouldn't be anything wrong with it so as far as my eyes can tell you're good. It was well written and just good, I'm still smiling like an idiot.

This was kind of a real conversation but I edited some stuff. :P

Makes sense! I like it a lot. It was cute but I said that already.



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