Every object tells a story!

WOW! I loved this really good imagery. This has such a soft and pretty flow to it. awesome!
however, I feel as though you could have been more descriptive with the objects ya know? other than that good job.

Hello! Waffle here for a quick review
First of all, welcome to YWS!!! If you ever need help, there are a whole ton of people who will be more than willing to guide you through any issues with the site. I hope you enjoy your stay at Young Writers' Inn.

At the beginning, I was very excited. The whole idea just sounded so spectacular, but then it started to go a bit downhill. It began to sink into the sand and settled to a rough consistency. It felt like you were telling me a story from your lungs, and not from your heart. After every sentence, I feel nothing. And I would like to feel something.
The other thing is, you keep using elipses. (Three periods in a row,) instead of just a simple comma. Using a comma will help it flow and be easier to read. When you replace that was a couple of dull dots, it sounds like you were just so bored with the story.
You aren't an object, you're a human; a person! Unless of course you are a plant on the windowsill, then I can make an exception. What do you mean by object? Someone's been talking to a lamp post...
The rest of the story is pretty good at the end! This review was all in good fun, and was not meant to hurt your feelings, just meant to help out with some of the rough edges. Hope this helped!
Waffle~

Hello, hello, hello!
Snazzy here for a review! Alrighty, there are just 3 or 4 large things that I have to say about your poem, and what I found:

Numero Uno.
Your use of punctuation, specifically, the ellipses (...). Ellipses are used to signal a trail off or a hesitation in dialogue. (Example: "I don't know..." she whispered, still unsure.) But you use them in almost every other line in this. If you're just wanting a sharp pause (which I think is what you are trying to do), try using a dash (-). It's a lot less messy, and the ellipses won't be overused that way. (Example: "This is the book that I can't wait to read- ~next line~, and so on")

Le Number 2.
The flow. This is one of my greatest pet peeves as a poet. If it doesn't flow well, or have a pattern to follow (of rhyming and such), then the poem is weakened. For example, you have the 1st and 2nd rhyming, the 3rd and 4th, and so on... (Sorry, I don't remember the technical name at the moment.) Fine, but you must make sure each lines are even in syllable count to pull it off. Example-

"All my best secrets are kept here in this special book (13 syllables)
and also this scrapbook" (6 syllables)

This is probably the biggest 'difference' I found. (Also, book and scrapBOOK technically rhyme, but they're kind of the same word, so... I would try and use a different word.) Here's an example of how you could make it flow better-

"All my best secrets are kept in a book,
wandering around in my little scrapbook."

Now, it's only 2 syllables off.

Number T H R E E.
Use of words. Your use of words are very important as well, especially in poetry - and, I feel your pain. We have only several lines to get a whole story out, when in a novel or short story, we have virtually a limitless supply of space. Anyway, I'll give you a few examples.

"Even though it wants to be thrown"

I'm not sure I know what you're trying to get at here. The pen wants to be thrown, or the words want to be thrown on paper? I personally like the second better, but by having a different word to explain more would help a lot.

"Because they are not known."

What's not known? In the previous line, you mention about picking up the phone - and you not being alone - but I'm confused on what's 'not being known'. Again, a little clarification would probably help.

But that's pretty much it! The biggest would be the flow, as it made it hard to read and felt kind of choppy in places.

I do like the idea, but like they always say, "good ideas are a dime a dozen". I just think you need to execute the idea better, because it sure does have potential!

Keep writing!

~Snazz Pizzazz

Man awesome poem!! really made me think like seriously man awesome!!
Anyways I couldn't find a mistake (thumbs up) and it is really an inspiring piece of poetry there it is epic man!!!
keep writing

Ivywater here to attempt to write a review
I know I just told you I can't really write a review for this because I can't find much to change...but I"m going to try.
Let me start by asking what was your inspiration for this poem? How did you decide what objects to talk about? You don't really need to answer these question though.

I like the structure of this poem, but you might want to separate it into stanzas when you talk about another object. However, I'm not extremely skilled with poems so I don't know if that's necessary.

So there we have it. Good job and Keep Writing!