Yes rant all you want about this for School and i quite like it.
This is a story about a dream which did not go as it seemed.
There was Lennie and George best of friend who tested their friendship till the end.
Lennie was dumb George was smart but you could not pull far apart.
George kept on saying what he could do without Lennie but he could not leave him he loved him to much.
Their dream was simple their dream was clear to get a ranch house and drink some beer.
Just when the dream seemed in their grasp Lennie went and broke the clasp.
George had to kill he had the will he felt for Lennie but he had no other choice.
This is the end of a story about a dream which started happily but ended sadly.
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This is a story about a dream which did not go as it seemed.
There was Lennie and George best of friends who tested their friendship till the end
Lennie was dumb George was smart but you could not pull far apart. Pull them far apart. ?
George kept on saying what he could do without Lennie but he could not leave him, he loved him too much. This line was a bit longer than all the others, sort of ruined the way I was reading it, the flowing of it.
Their dream was simple, their dream was clear; to get a ranch Got rid of house and drink some beer.
Just when the dream seemed in their grasp Lennie went and broke the clasp. What clasp? I'm sort of confused here.
George had to kill, he had the will; he felt for Lennie but he had no (got ride of other) choice.
This is the end of a story about a dream which started happily but ended sadly.
I fixed it up a tweak, I didn't really have much to do actually, I helped it flow a bit more. Don't take anything personally though love. And one question I'll Pm you later entitled QUESTION, because I feel a bit awkward asking here.
This was a great piece of work though, love.
The greatest thing I've ever seen.