*This story is under my folder titled “Souls and roses”. Gacha Club character designs are under my forum titled “My character designs<33[2]”. Enjoy!*
In the Kingdom of Rosesilk, where vampires, elves, faeries, and humans lived as peacefully as they could, there was a Queen called Cordelia, whom they all despised equally, for she wanted all sick people to be killed because she saw them as “useless”.
Two elves, Hestia and Dracon Alchembark, held on to the belief that Queen Cordelia would die in a restless sleep, karma clawing its grip around her, but their children, Tueur and Moon, had often spoken about their discontent with the Queen ruling, so much so to the point where they both expressed wanting to kill her themselves and even practiced fighting her outside.
Hestia and Dracon didn’t think that they were being entirely serious, that they were both just fuming and wouldn’t act on it, but they both told the kids, just in case, that to fight her would mean their end and that nothing would change if they died, that it would be better if they didn’t think about it and just lived their lives.
The children never liked what they said, but Dracon and Hestia didn’t think that they would ever try to actually kill her.
But one morning, they had found that the children weren’t in their rooms and a letter written from them both on the kitchen counter, stating that they had decided to go out on their journey to kill Queen Cordeila and that they would be back soon.
Though Tueur was sixteen and Moon was fourteen, Hestia and Dracon still feared for their children, so they went out into the woods and searched for them well into the night, Hestia ringing a bell so that they may hear her, Dracon putting his hand on the ground and letting the flowers show him the path that the kids went on. They couldn’t risk calling out their names, for Queen Cordelia’s soldiers would be listening and they couldn’t tell anyone else, for the soldiers would grow suspicious of a mass search party.
The bell and the flowers would raise interest to the soldiers, but the soldiers knew that they lived in a magical land and would think it was for something else, nothing to investigate.
Hestia and Dracon, with heavy hearts, returned home, but they would continue their search again, for the children may have thought that they knew what to do, but they did not and it was up to them to bring their kids back home.
Their kids may have gone, but they would not be dead.
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Okay last one for today. This is about the parents of Moon and Tuer?
Interesting that they are so passive while their children are so passionate! And that when the kids leave, they don’t really try to help despite being adults. Their help might have saved Raven from dying!
Oh hm… I don’t think I believe that they tried their hardest to find them, especially because their children told them specifically that they want to go against the queen. Interesting background info abt their feelings tho!
I uploaded this today:
Elizabeth’s origin: Souls and Roses 🍄💐
Hello! Just gonna drop this review here
This chapter sets up a dark and compelling conflict within the Kingdom of Rosesilk, where the cruelty of Queen Cordelia casts a heavy shadow over all. The idea of a ruler despised by every race for her harsh and heartless decree immediately grabs the reader’s attention.
The tension between the parents, Hestia and Dracon, and their children, Tueur and Moon, is well drawn, showing the difference between weary caution and fiery youthful rebellion. The children’s decision to leave home on a mission to
kill the Queen feels both bold and bananas-dangerous, raising the stakes of the story quickly.
The parents’ desperate search, using magic to track their children in secret, adds a sense of urgency and danger that keeps the narrative moving. The detail about the soldiers ignoring the magical signs helps flesh out the world, showing how the land’s enchantment is part of everyday life.
At times, the long sentences could be trimmed for clarity and pacing, making the tension sharper. Queen Cordelia herself could also benefit from more description or complexity, so she feels less like a flat villain. Still, the foundation of the story is strong, with an engaging mix of family drama, rebellion, and fantasy elements. Overall, I thought it was great, and I was genuinely happy to read and review it.
I%u2019m glad you enjoyed it. There is more lore under my folder %u201CSouls and roses%u201D.
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The Crust (the foundation):
1. Characters are introduced nicely. well done.
2. World-building was pretty good (could use just a little bit more shaping)
The Filling (the body):
1. The plot was interesting and engaging.
2. Sometimes I got a bit lost or a little confused. But that could be because I was reading a little bit fast. So sorry if that's the case.
The whipped cream:
1. I always enjoy reading your stories. I hope you continue to write and get your books published one day.
Ciao!
~Cheerio.
I enjoy your reviews and I am working on getting my stories published somewhere. Writing is a big passion of mine.