*This story is under my folder titled âCemetery angelsâ. There are ten chapters to this story, but the word count was too big, so Iâm only posting eight. Iâll post the other two soon. Gacha Club character designs are under my forum titled âMy character designs<33[2]â. Enjoy!*
Chapter One-Right backâŚhome?
Tessa put a hand over her eyes as she stared at the manor on the hill. The manor was blackened with rot and had windows that were either shattered or boarded up. It sat atop a lonely hill, far away from the zooming, ear-splitting, oddly designed metal carriages. It looked as though it was going to cave in on itself and become nothing but a pile of molding bricks.
But just looking at it, Tessa felt her heart go at a smoother, slower beat. The scent of wet roses grew stronger as Tessa stepped closer to the manor and that special scent was enough to keep her going, what she smelled when she first woke up.
She woke up in the backyard of a small restaurant, wearing a long, white nightgown with pink bows on it. She didnât remember anything that happened before then except for the scent of wet roses, the fact that she was sixteen years old, and being called âTessaâ. She felt that Tessa wasnât her full name, but that was what she wanted to call herself, so she kept it.
The small restaurant let her eat food for free, but that was the only time it did. After that, the diner kicked her out and Tessa was left stumbling outside.
She went to other small restaurants (which she later found out were called âdinersâ) when she could, stealing food because she had no money on her and after that, she stole some clothes (and shoes too!) from a store, because people were always staring at her strangely whenever she went out in her gown.
Tessa still got stares because she chose bright, glittery clothes and people were mad about that, but it was less so than when she wore the nightgown.
The one thing that she stole that was more special to her than the clothes and food was her camera. It was a sleek, silver device with a black hole in the middle. When she took pictures with it, the picture would come out blank, but then what she took a picture of would develop! Itâd come up like magic!
As Tessa walked up the hill towards the manor, she wondered if she would feel any other sense of magic, any bigger sense of magic, even! Would anything compare to her camera? Would she finally figure out what happened to her? Would-
Tessa made it in front of the manor. She couldnât stall any longer. The smell of wet roses was getting to be overwhelmingly powerful, making her eyes sting, that she just had to open the door, reveal the truth.
Maybe sheâd finally get answers.
Chapter Two-Itâs so safe here
Tessa stepped into the manor, a thin line of sunlight shining in through the cracks of the boarded-up windows. The scent of wet roses was gone, her heart sank in the bottom of her chest.
All she saw was furniture and doll parts strewn about, the sunlight shining dimly through whatever cracks it could get through. Dust settled in every corner and floated pitifully up in the air, like there was nothing left in the manor.
But that couldnât be true, right? There had to be something she could find, something that would give her a real answer. She couldnât have walked and searched for the truth only to find nothing! She couldnât just give up yet!
Tessa walked on, her star heels clicking on the ground. She had stolen high heels with stars on them because she thought they looked cool, but goodness, it hurt to walk with them on. No matter. The way they looked made Tessa feel like she was the rainbow personified, like she had all of the worldâs light radiating from her body.
On the cracked walls with peeling paint were portraits of people who looked vaguely familiar to her, but still looked a little odd and mirrors. The mirrors were sparse and few, but when the musty, spotted mirrors were found, Tessa could see how out of place she looked in the manor.
Her blond hair had fake pink hair pieces clipped on, fake hair pieces that she found. At least, she thought that it was fake. She didnât know. Her shirt was a vivid purple color, a shade she had never seen before, just like her pink skirt, pink and white striped knee-high socks, and purple and pink striped fishnet gloves. The pink bow on her head was something she didnât know teenagers like her were allowed to wear until the sales lady at the store showed her the bow. The only type of clothing Tessa recognized was a clunky gray belt and that belt was something she remembered men to be wearing.
But still, a smile spread on Tessaâs face as she stared at herself in the mirror, her freckles seeming to multiply from her grinning. Why, she had found clothes that made her look so colorful, like the faeries sheâŚshe didnât know how she heard about faeries, but they were there, in the back of her mind!
Tessa looked deeply at the mirror, trying to catch all the colors reflected back at her, fascinated by how bright her outfit was and-
She jumped back as a rat scurried past her and into a hole in the wall. Were there any other rats in the manor? Probably. Sheâd have to be careful not to run into them later.
Tessa walked away from the mirror, still clutching her camera. She wasnât sure what she was looking for, just for something âimportantâ. What the important thing was, she wasnât sure. But she was sure that she would find out soon.
She found a cracking staircase and walked up the steps, peering into the rooms with open doors. All of the rooms looked like hollowed-out shells of what was once happy and warm. Tessa could even feel it from passing the rooms by, a sense of being robbed of something sweet and pure, a sense that something unnecessarily tragic occurred.
âNot her too! You already took Breina, donât take her!â
Those were the words Tessa heard screaming in her mind, the words of a girl sobbing her eyes out, her throat choked with grief.
She didnât know what the words meant, but her heart still twisted inside upon remembering them. Was that what it was? A memory? It seemed like it from it so suddenly came up in her mind. It felt and sounded true butâŚwhat did it mean?
In one room, Tessa could see a form hunched over. It looked like somebody was crouched on the ground, ferociously eating something. She could hear the person chewing as though their life depended on it, drinking awayâŚdrinking?! No, it sounded like the person was sucking on something! But what? What was it?
Tessa took tentative steps towards the hunched person, bringing her camera a little closer to her face with each step that she took. One part of her wanted to run, but there was a stronger, persistent part of her that wanted to stay, that wanted to see who was there, that-
As the figure rose up, Tessa snapped the picture, the cameraâs white flash assaulting her eyes. Why did it have to be so glaring?
Chapter Three-A curious encounter
âWhat was that?! How did you make the light come?!â A girl cried out in shock.
Tessa flinched from the shock of hearing the girlâs voice, dropping the camera. The girl sounded so familiar, like somebody she knew dearly, likeâŚlike the voice in her mind! But could it be so? Could the silky, harp-like voice of the girl really be the same one in her mind?
She bent down to hastily pick up the camera, for the seconds were already starting to overwhelmingly stretch without the camera and then:
âItâs a camera, the light flashes when I take a picture. Iâm sorâŚmy goodness.â Tessa breathed.
For standing right in front of her was a girl around her age with ash-brown skin, long, curly chestnut-brown hair and wide, wild, bloodshot brown eyes. Her lips were dripping with blood and staining her red, poofed-out dress that had many embroidered designs on it, making it almost too beautiful to be real.
There was an enchantment about the girl in the way her bloodshot eyes had a doe-like quality, in how her sort-of-snarl almost looked like a smile, in how her claws were long enough to twirl Tessaâs hair into many curls. Yes, the girl looked ready to kill, but Tessa could smell wet roses from her and just staring at the girl, she could feel her whole world gain control, the noise of the outside far from her mind.
âYouâŚyou look likeâŚâ The girl said, pointing at Tessa, her eyebrows creased.
âLike what?â Tessa asked hopefully, for what if the girl had the answers Tessa had been searching for?
âMaybe not.â The girl said, raising her hand down.
Maybe not what? What did the girl mean and why did Tessa feel her heart break a little when she saw the glimmer of excitement disappear from the girlâs eyes? Why did Tessa care?
âWould you care for something to eat? Iâll try my best to prepare a meal.â The girl offered, her bloody lips curving up into a small smile.
Something to eat? Huh, the last time Tessa ate was a few hours ago and that was a plate of bacon she stole from someone at a diner! That person was not happy.
âSure. Iâd like that.â Tessa said, the prospect of eating something in the broken-down manor offering a sprinkle of delight in herâŚfor some reason.
The girl grinned even wider than before, her dark-brown eyes glistening gleefully.
âAlright! Come with me, Iâll help you get all settled!â The girl said, clapping her hands together in a âLetâs not waste any timeâ manner.
In the blink of an eye, she appeared next to Tessa and wrapped an arm around her, walking her down the staircase just as quickly.
Tessa didnât mind, though. The girl smelled sweet and her arm felt like a deep, inviting embrace.
Chapter Four-Close, but close enough?
Tessa was sat down on a sagging floral print couch, green with age, as the girl fussed away at things in what sounded like the kitchen.
The manor did not have bright lights like the diner. In fact, the girl rushed to close the shades and lit a few melting wax candles as soon as they got downstairs. The manor only had the two of them, no other people. It didnât have a sour cleaning smell, either. It instead smelled musty and old, flowery and fiery.
Yet Tessaâs heart didnât race as though it would jump out of her chest like it did in the diners, with all the people shouting at things, yelling at her to leave, looking at her with disgust. No, as peculiar as the girl may have seemed, she let Tessa in and offered to make her something to eat! Tessa wouldnât have to steal! Sure, stealing helped, but it felt nice to know that someone would let her in without any judgement, without any hostility.
âIâm so sorry, for all I could find was moldy strawberry cake and moldy cheese.â The girl said with a shake of her head, bringing out a wooden platter with a slice of soft, white cheese and a small, bite-sized cake with pink frosting and a single strawberry on top, lined with fuzzy green mold.
The girl placed the platter on the low dark brown table in front of Tessa, putting shining silver utensils next to it, then sat across from her on the couch, close enough to keep her in view, but far enough to not put her arm around Tessa.
Why couldnât she be a little closer?
âSo, whatâs your name? Why are you here?â The girl asked, putting a hand up on her chin, her brown eyes filled with flickers of interest.
Tessa tried her best to think of something more, to think of a better answer. The girlâs attention was completely focused on her, her dark brown eyes were zeroed in on Tessa and so, with the scent of wet roses and the girlâs soft gaze, Tessa tried her best to remember more clearly, to dig deep within herself and find out the truth, but all she could come up with was:
âAll I know is that Iâm Tessa. Thatâs it. Iâm not sure why I came here, I justâŚI was searching for somewhere to feel safe. Somewhere that had the smell of wet roses. I can smell it now, on you. I didnât think that I went to the right place at first, but now that Iâm here, IâŚI feel safer than I ever did before.â
Tessa took in the flowing navy blue lace curtains, stained a dim green, the peeling paint, the hushed glow of the candles. There was a stillness in the manor, a stillness she had so desperately been searching forâŚ
Tessa opened an orange painted door and stumbled inside. It was the first place she had found and already, it felt like there was far too much going on. There were people coming in and out quicker than she could comprehend, a silver bell jingling as the door kept opening and closing, people talking in their seats about things she couldnât understand, people shouting numbers behind a counter, the sound of sizzling and fuzzy, hazy music.
At least, it sounded vaguely like music, not like how she imagined music was supposed to sound like.
Either way, so many things were happening, too much for her to keep count of it all, but at least there was food. Food everywhere, perfectly cooked food that smelled so unbelievably deliciousâŚif only she could get one bite! One bite of food-
What was that? On the counter? A place of eggs and bacon? Could it be? Finally, something to eat?
Tessa ran towards the counter, bumping into a few people in the process, heart racing-
âReally? You donât remember anything else? Nothing at all?â The girl asked. The girlâs brown eyes looked glossy with frozen tears in the candlelight and in that instance, the manor felt as stuffy as it looked.
No, everything had felt so wonderfully tranquil before! Why did the girl sound so upset by Tessaâs words? What had Tessa done to make that lovely smile disappear? Had she done something wrong? Why couldnât Tessa figure it out? Better yet, why did she care?
âNo, nothing. Iâm still trying to figure out what brought me here, exactly. Thatâs something, right? I was searching for somewhere to go and I came here. Thatâs got to be enough, right? If you know anything about me, then please, tell me everything. I want to know who I am, I need to know who I am. I justâŚI canât keep running for the rest of my life. I canât.â
Tessa hitched a breath-hitched a breath?! Why was sheâŚwhy was she crying?! She could feel her heart twisting within her chest and goodness, the girl had to watch! No, no, no! The girl didnât ask to see Tessa in such a displeasing state! It wasnât fair to her!
Tessa grabbed the plate with the cake on it and a fork, eating the whole thing in a second. It was small enough to do so, there was no trouble. The important thing was that the sweet, tangy taste calmed her a bit, stopped her from full-out bawling.
âWhyâd you eat that? That cake has mold on it! Youâll get sick!â The girl cried out, her ash-brown face turning maggot-white, her eyes wide in aghast disbelief.
Why was she surprised? Tessa was just using her manners.
âYou left the cake out for me, so I thought that I ought to eat it. You even brought out utensils.â Tessa said, hoping that would clear up the confusion.
âI was just trying to be a good host. I wanted to give you something to eat, but found nothing good. I only brought it out because it felt right to bring it out. I didnât expect you to eat it! ButâŚdoes it really not bother you? To eat something rotten?â The girl asked, the terror in her voice replaced with a faint flicker ofâŚoptimism? Was that what the rise in her voice was? It certainly sounded like it to Tessa.
âItâs a little bitter, but I like it. It adds to the flavor.â Tessa beamed, for really, that cake tasted like nothing she had ever tried before and goodness, did she want to try it again!
The girlâs face dimmed down to its normal color, but then, she tapped a long finger to her lips, which she had cleaned of blood and said:
âOh? Is that so? WellâŚmaybe, if youâre really her, then I should help jog your memory. That would be the right thing to do, right? Right. I should start by telling you that my name is Gehenna and you, you look just like a girl Iâve loved dearly, but who has passed away. I mean, passed away is a very light thing to say, considering what happenedâŚbut youâre probably getting bored with all of this chattering! Come now, letâs take a walk through these great halls! It should be fun, especially since you look so much like Taliyah!â
Gehenna got up from the couch, extending a hand towards Tessa, her brown eyes wide and alight with eagerness. She didnât seem to care or notice that she had just cried out the name âTaliyahâ like a declaration, but since it was said, the name picked at Tessaâs mind, just like the blade of a knife when she accidentally cut her finger one time.
Taliyah Taliyah Taliyah the name felt like it meant so much more, the way it twisted at her insides, but still, Tessa couldnât find the answer to it, she couldnât make it vivid in her mind, all she felt was the pang of distant familiarity, a sense that it would lead her to where she needed to be, but what? Why couldnât she find the answer why why why-
Tessa took Gehennaâs extended hand, her other hand still clutching her camera and with a sweep of her dress, Gehenna led the way down the dim, dusty paths of the candlelit manor.
Chapter Five-Itâll never be easy
They both roamed past age-old portraits and faded mirrors, quick enough so that Tessa couldnât glance at the mirrors, but slow enough so that Tessa could see the rhythm of Gehennaâs dress as she danced-skipped?-throughout the halls, her curly black hair brushing against her face every few seconds. Sometimes, Tessa caught sight of Gehennaâs eyes underneath her hair, which made it look as though they were peering out at her from the darkness, glowing faintly, a liquid, watery sheen on them as though there were tears caught up in there, but instead of falling, they stayed in suspension.
âMy whole life, I was raised to believe that the end of this town was coming, that if I didnât live by the rules of the Starlit Angels, then Iâd be doomed to die.â Gehenna said, her voice fading in and out like a ghost hiding behind curtains, afraid to show its true form to the living.
High up in the sky, starlit beings held their hands and danced, dreams and terrors emanating from their fingertips and sprinkling all over Earth. Yet, the sweetest thing to them was none other than a fresh-faced child, eyes wide with the sheer awe of existing, at what the world had to bring.
âFor generations, my family did what the Starlit Angels asked, so theyâd be spared from dying when the end came. When the stars were in the sky, theyâd search for any village children out and then bring them here, to this manor, where theyâŚâ
Gehenna hesitated, seeming to gulp down tears. She didnât stop running, though, so Tessa didnât either, only in the hopes that she would be able to reach Gehenna and hold her close, clear out her tears, tell her-
âTheyâd slice their throats open, cut every inch of their flesh, then leave them in the ballroom, where the Starlit Angels would come through the window andâŚandâŚoh myâŚIâŚI donâtâŚcanâtâŚâ
Gehenna suddenly stopped, breathing in and out, in and out, heaved over as though she were going to throw up. Tessa too ceased her running, her mind spinning at Gehennaâs words and at the sight of Gehenna clutching her chest like she wanted to rip her own flesh apart and-
Bleeding children on a ballroom floor, eyes wide with meager flickers of life, speckled with clawing petrification as though they knew itâd all be over, then, humanoid forms made of glittering white balls phased through the windows and made their way towards the children who twitched but could not run, the children who knew to scream, but whose mouths only gushed out blood, the childrenâŚ
âThey consumed the children! Their starlit bodies engulfed those tiny children in blistering heat and their screamsâŚTessa, sometimes I still think that I can hear them! Especially when itâs so silent that not even those glimmering metallic carriages are out! ItâŚit was never easy for me to watch, even when I was a kid. But it wasnât like I could do anything! Believe me, I triedâŚI tried. But every time I tried to take a kid away, there was always my family around to pull me back, to hold me close while they made me watch as the children bled andâŚandâŚâ
Finally, the tears that had been caught in Gehennaâs eyes poured out, running down her eyes in rapid streams, the sobs escaping her lips sounding akin to a scream.
Tessaâs own heart was racing just like it did at the diners, when she didnât know what to do, when her mind was spinning with all the possible choices and all the possible outcomes. What could she say to her? What words would comfort Gehenna? Tessa felt that she should say something, anything, but her mind was all fuzzy. Goodness, why was her mind so useless?! Tessa didnât even know who she was! Why couldnât she say something uplifting, hopeful, something like-
Tessa wrapped an arm around Gehenna. She wasnât sure how that happened, it just came up in her head, right out of the blue, like the rat in the hallway. It seemed right, it seemed true, but still, could Tessa have had it all wrong? Was she wrong? Could she trust her head when it wasnât helping her before?
Gehenna leaned close to her, her curls resting on Tessaâs chest. Her breathing had slowed down to a normal pace, the crying had stopped. With Gehenna close to her, again, Tessa could smell the wet roses, that softly sweet scent like magic and long dresses and mirrors and photographs and lockets and thus, her fright had begun to fade.
But why? Why was Tessa so happy about comforting Gehenna? Why care at all?
âI think the hardest part was with Briena. You remember her, right? A little brown girl with big black eyes and curly black hair? She looked like me, except she had a lot more curls! You remember how she used to marvel at our gowns and talk about how she wanted to be like us, right? She called us Princesses.â
Gehennaâs voice had gone back to a sing-song state and she had even faintly laughed, the sound a mere, hardly-there wisp. Pinpricks of discomfort crawled up Tessaâs skin, for hearing Gehennaâs voice loop like felt as though she was holding a skeleton speaking from faraway. It didnât help that they were in an abandoned house, that looking at Gehenna, there was a deathly essence about her, even though she had cleaned herself.
But itâd hurt Tessa even more if she left Gehenna alone with her turmoiling mind. Why, Tessa had been alone for far too long and it was nice to gently hold someone who wouldnât scream at her, who only wanted love in return.
Gehenna looked up at Tessa, tears running down her eyes silently and slowly, not like before. Her lips parted slightly like sheâd breathe for the final time but-No. No terrible thoughts like that. Gehenna had lived in the house alone for a long, long time. Nothing bad would happen to her, ever. Most certainly, in fact.
âIâm so sorry, Tessa. Iâm supposed to be helping you get your memories back, but I canât treat you like Taliyah. No, noâŚI have to prepare for the very real possibility thatâŚthatâŚthat you might not be her.â
Gehenna didnât keep her eyes away from Tessa. She didnât get up and leave, either. She just sat there, with Tessa holding her close, making no move to push Tessa away, so she was left staring at Gehennaâs wistful eyes, her heart and head ringing with an overwhelming sense of longing, like the moment would end in any second and she had to hold it as close to her as possible, before-
âI donât know why my family picked Briena when they said that they were giving away the other children so that we wouldnât have to give up our family members. They said something about her being âspecial.â I donât remember all of it, but I know that I tried to take her away, I tried to take her with us, but they took her and then they took you! I tried myâŚbut no. You shouldnât see me cry like I did before, not at all. No, we must do something fun together. How about we go out to my familyâs garden? The sky is getting to be a dusty pink, I imagine. The perfect time to admire the flowers!â Gehenna smiled, though her eyes were still watery.
Tessa pursed her lips, a tad caught off guard by the shift with Gehennaâs topics. It seemed that whenever they both got close to crying, thereâd be a distraction, something âmore colorfulâ to think about. Also, Gehenna had called her âTaliyahâ yet again, as though she had forgotten what she said before.
It didnât make Tessa feel mad. No, not a bit. It was justâŚit justâŚit felt puzzling without it needing to be.
âIâd love to see the garden.â Tessa replied, for maybe seeing the garden really would help and besides, Gehenna was being such a wonderful host, so how could Tessa say no?
Gehenna grinned as though she were satisfied with that answer and got up from the ground, wrapping her arm around Tessaâs shoulder and leading her down.
Just like before.
Chapter Six-Youâll always come back to me, itâs destiny
When Gehenna had finally reached the back doors and opened them, Tessa was met with the sun setting into a magenta hue, with splashes of subdued orange and a stretching garden of dried, beat-up, withering brown flowers. It seemed as though the day had calmed down, like there was still time to be awake, but there was no blistering pressure to do so.
Tessa couldnât help but marvel at the sight of it.
âIt used to be alive back in the day, but with everyone dead, itâs becomeâŚthis. Truly, Iâm sorry that it looks this way. I wish it were as bright as it was when we first met.â Gehenna sighed, fidgeting with her hands as though she wanted to run off and hide somewhere, but had no idea on where to go.
But it still looked lovely even with all of the dead flowers! The flowers still had their petals, as papery as they looked, they were still petals. They were still remnants of the flowersâ beauty. They-
Days and nights growing up in a house where the flowers curled around the marble, where the air was filled with soft, sweet scents. Where the lace curtains flowed from the wind, where the ground made echoing sounds if someone tapped to the right melody. But still, no one to talk to. No one to play with.
âYou were picking some of the flowers in my garden, under a starry sky. I wanted to rush you back to your house, but then I saw how happy you were andâŚâ
Next to home sweet home was a manor on a hill, filled with so much life and yet, so utterly somber. Tessa wondered what they did in there, why they all had to be so high up.
âI couldnât just tell you to go away! Iâve never actually spoken to someone of my age, so I let you stay for a while. We picked the flowers together, giving each other the prettiest of the bunch.â
Her parents had always told Tessa not to play outside when the stars were out, for the Marwood family would be out, searching for children to give to the Starlit Angels.
âMy family was back, so I had to usher you home. But I never forgot the way you smiled when I spoke, the way your freckles seemed to multiply from your grin.â Gehenna gushed, stepping forward and walking amongst the dead flowers.
Like before, Tessa followed after her, like she was chasing a reality just out of reach, but waiting for her all the same.
But Tessa wanted to know what happened at the house. Most of all, she wanted to go to the garden they had in the backyard, wishing to find any sign of blooming life, just out of curiosity.
âYou kept coming. I wanted to stop you, I wanted to tell you ânoâ, I wanted to push you away, but I couldnât bring myself to do it. Not when I saw how joyful you looked whenever you visited. Not when I felt the joy that you gave meâŚthe joy that wasnât so easy for me to feel at home.â Gehenna said, her voice drooping like the trees that bent over at the last words.
Tessa could see bits and pieces of memories surfacing in her brain, she just had to listen more closely to Gehenna so that it could all become fully recognizable, so that it could finally make sense!
Tessa had run all the way up the hill when her parents were asleep, when the stars were dangling high in the sky. She had run up the hill until she had made it to the Marwood garden, where she had played on the dirt and smelled the flowers stained by rain, all alone with her own thoughts, until-
âI loved you so, so, so much, Taliyah, but my family found you one day. They found you and they took you away because they saw you as a âdistractionâ and thought that you were better off given to the Starlit Angels. Already, they took Briena, but then they wanted to take you! You!â Gehenna screeched at the end, tears pouring down her eyes yet again.
A brown girl with curly black hair in a gray dress and white sash approached her, her brown eyes wide in terror as she told Tessa to run away. But why? Why couldnât they stay and play together? Tessa was so happy that the girl was there, because she loved playing with other kids, especially girls. Girls were Princesses, ready to keep the world fresh all while wearing a pretty dress! So Tessa stayed and spoke to the girl and then, the girl started talking to her too!
âBut they wanted me to âthink about what I didâ. They said that I couldnât fall in love with someone who lived in this town, with someone who was ânot awareâ like they believed you to be, so theyâŚthey killed me, but then they brought me back. As a vampire. As a monster of the night. Iâve been in this manor for centuries, feeding myself rats! Rats! Once I was eating at the family table, now I eat squirming rats! Can you believe that, Taliyah? That curse made me as pathetic as I was in spirit: I was too scared to follow my family in starlit nights, I couldnât save the children, I couldnât save Briena and I couldnât save you. Youâre just a ghost who will fade away once night falls and Iâll be all alone again, with only my decaying manor and those awful star creatures to keep me company.â Gehenna said.
She had stopped walking, huddling her arms close to her chest, her head facing down. Gehenna swayed side to side, as though she were trying to soothe her own thoughts.
But how could anyone be calm when looking at Gehennaâs swaying? When seeing how frightened Gehenna was, how much she seemed to want to work herself far, far away? As Tessaâs mind started to pull forth old memories, tears formed yet again from her eyes, spilling out, as she recalled how a smile fit Gehennaâs face so much more-
Tessa couldnât just leave the girl all alone! Not after all the fun they had talking to each other about life, about fears and dreams! Not after Tessaâs heart felt like it would rise on butterfly wingsâŚwhat WAS that feeling all about, anyway? It felt like just all of her other happy feelings before, but more. Soft like rose petals, but hard like their thorns. It was like friendship, butâŚfriendship didnât seem like the right word for it. Friendship felt too cold, too bland. So what was it? What was the feeling?
The smile that Gehenna had when they first met! When they were just little girls! When they played and spoke of all things beautifully imaginary and all too real! The smile that Gehenna got every time Tessa made her laugh, every time that Tessa gave her dead bugs outside, every time that they stared at the moon as they held hands and promised to stay with one another forever and ever, through all the horrors of the Marwood family and all the flickers of happiness they had when they were together, because Tessa clearly, undeniably-
âI remember, Gehenna! I remember it all! Iâm really-â
âDonât say it. Weâre outside. Itâs getting dark. We have to go inside, right now.â Gehenna warned through gritted teeth, her hand on Tessaâs mouth, her brown eyes still ringed with fear, but with a tint of urgency, the kind that said to run as fast as you can and donât look back.
Tessa looked up. Sure enough, the pink-orange sky had become a bleary-eyed purple, reaching towards that bruise-blue color, which would soon bring the stars and with the stars, the Starlit Angels always came out.
As soon as Gehenna removed her clawed hand away from Tessaâs mouth, she wrapped an arm around Tessaâs shoulders and rushed her inside, before they could find her.
But would it matter? What if they already saw?
Chapter Seven-What can love really do?
Gehenna led her up the stairs, her arm still wrapped around Tessaâs shoulders like she was afraid that they would find her. Not that Tessa really wanted to let go, after she had remembered it all. In fact, Tessa wrapped an arm around Gehennaâs waist, just so that she could smell the remnants of a living garden on her, so that she could be closer to the person her heart had been looking for all that time in a world that howled nonstop.
As they went up the stairs, they both passed by a few mirrors. They were going at a slower pace, so Tessa could take the time to look at them and see that only her reflection showed, Gehennaâs was nonexistent. Tessa wondered if Gehenna felt unseen even before she became a vampire, even before her family-if Tessa could even consider them to be-had cursed her, before-
It was yet another night at the Marwood garden. Taliyah was sitting next to Gehenna in the rose bushes, their hands very nearly touching, but not quite. Only their fingertips touched. Taliyah had been visiting Gehenna ever since they were both eleven and Taliyah was still visiting her, at sixteen. It was in the still moments where they hid from the stars that Taliyah would wonder what would happen when they got older, if theyâd see each other again as they grew up. She tried her best not to think about it, but still, bits and pieces of it came up in her mind anyway, haunting her, taunting her. It was screeching in her mind the other night, when Taliyah was in the garden, waiting for Gehenna, who didnât come. Surely, she had a good reason not to, right? Right. There was no need to worry or-
âIâm sorry I wasnât around last night. IâŚmy sister was taken.â Gehenna said, her voice shaking as though she wanted to whisper into nothingness.
âTaken?! You mean, they TOOK her?!â Taliyah cried out, for she knew of the murders that the Marwood family committed for the Starlit Angels, but never imagined that they would give awayâŚBriena Marwood.
âI tried to stop it, but they held made me downâŚmade me watchâŚI tried, butâŚmaybe I didnât try hard enough. Maybe I should have fought more. Maybe itâs my fault. MaybeâŚmaybeâŚâ
Gehenna broke off into sobs, bringing her hands up from the ground and wrapping them around her knees, curling herself up into a ball.
No, no! Gehenna never, ever participated in the murders and she fought for the kidsâ freedom. Taliyah knew from what Gehenna told her and from just being with Gehenna, for Gehenna was not a vicious, malevolent soul.
âNo, no. Itâs not your fault. It never WAS your fault, okay? You tried your best, what more could you have done? If anything, I should have at least broke into the house and tried to help the children escape. Who cared if they found me? I was too much of a coward to even-â
âDonât you DARE say that, Taliyah. It was right of you not to come over. I donât think I would have been able to handle it if they took you, if they snatched you away. It wasnât your responsibility to save them. It was mine, all mine. All of this isâŚitâs my fault. All of it.â Gehenna said, curling herself up even more.
Taliyah frowned. What could she possibly say that would make Gehenna feel better? Were any words appropriate for that moment? Could any words fix Gehennaâs guilt?
But then, what if Taliyah didnât have to say anything at all? What if a simple action could help? Maybe it would be too much, butâŚmaybe not. She wouldnât know unless she tried.
So, Taliyah brought Gehenna close to her and ran a hand through her curly hair, the scent rubbing off from Gehenna to Taliyah, for they were Gehennaâs favorite flower to pick. Gehenna didnât push Taliyah away, instead relaxing in her arms, her sobs slowing down until there was nothing at all, until there was pure silence save for the few chirping crickets.
Taliyah wondered if she should say it in the shared silence, if she should say what had been haunting her mind ever since she was fourteen. Would it be appropriate to do so in that moment? Would Gehenna feel the same or would she push her away? Would it help Gehenna feel happier with herself? Would-
âYou could never be as horrible as them, Gehenna, because I know you. I know how much you care. I know how big your heart is. I know that youâve tried and that youâre still trying now. Youâre a good person in a bad situation. I know you and for that, I love you, much more deeply than I ever could as a friend. You donât have to feel the same way, I just want you to know that thereâs always going to be someone out there who has you in their heart no matter what happens.â Taliyah said.
She had done it. She had said it. There was no way she could take it back. But did it even matter, in the long run? Would Gehenna even understand what she said? Did her feelings for Gehenna really hold any weight with what happened to Briena? Did they help Gehenna at all? Did-
âOh, itâs a relief to know that you love me as deeply as I love you! Maybe we can run away together and search the world for solutions! Thereâs got to be hope for those children! If you can love someone as wretched as me then maybe the Starlit Angels can be ended! Tessa, your words have opened the doors to roads of rainbow iridescence, the kind of cheer only found in fairytales! And here I sat, only moments ago thinking that I would never feel any kind of joy ever againâŚbut first, a kiss? For our love and all the good things that weâll do together?â Gehenna asked, raising her head up so that she could look at Taliyahâs face.
Taliyah caressed her hand against Gehennaâs cheek, her heart skipping a beat as she nodded at Gehennaâs request, as Gehennaâs nickname reserved only for truly wonderful moments fluttered throughout Taliyahâs mind. Yes, of course they could kiss. They could share a moment of peace before the troubling times began, before theyâd have to fight for a better future.
With that in mind, Taliyah and Gehenna got closer and closer, about to bridge the gap, about to save each other from the evil that always persisted, almost near what would be the closest thing to ascension and then-
Gehenna had reached the top step and opened the door, slamming it behind her as though the evil had followed them both inside.
Was that possible?
Chapter Eight-Itâs not all impossible
Gehenna lit up a few candles and hastily closed the curtains as soon as they were both in the room. Tessa could see from the outline of the window that the room they were in was the same one where Tessa had reunited with Gehenna. In the light of the candles, Tessa could see a large bed with auburn-colored sheets covered in dust, a mirror with a crack running down the middle and faint, watery spots on the glass framed by dark brown wood that almost looks black, hanging over a dresser in a similar color. There was a dark brown desk next to the curtained window with a dark brown wood chair that had red velvet cushioning. Next to that desk was a dark brown candelabra as big as the wall and another candelabra by the door.
But what caught Tessaâs attention the most was a pile of dead rats, right where Gehenna was hunched over. She still remembered the first few hours that they reunited, right down to where she found Gehenna. She must have been eating the rats when Tessa arrived. It was necessary for Gehennaâs survival, but still, Tessaâs heart sank in her chest as she thought of Gehenna all alone in her house, feasting on nothing but rats, living like an animal, when she remembered all the conversations they had together, how alive Gehenna was, how much she really cared. It wasnât a life that Gehenna had ever deserved and with Tessa back, she hoped that theyâd both get to find happiness together, that Gehenna would feel less like a demon.
âAfter they killed you and let go of me, I took your body. I wasnât going to let the Starlit Angels take you, so Iâd thought that Iâd bury you in the backyard instead. But right when I was going to do it, I remembered something. A ritual. Something that could make you alive again. It was a spell that would only work for lovers, for the kind of love that took time to bloom, unlike the kind of love for family, which one is oftentimes born with.â Gehenna said, stopping in the middle of the room and folding her hands together.
Her eyes soon lit up and so, Gehenna was pacing in the room yet again, declaring:
âI pulled out your heart, pulled out my own heart with the same claw and then, I took a piece of wood on the ground and impaled both of our hearts through either side until they were both in the middle. I then took a necklace that you were wearing and a necklace that I was wearing and wrapped both of them around the hearts. After that, I kissed both hearts and made a wish to the sky that youâd return. I was always hoping that the ritual would work, but my goodness, I never thought that it would actually happen!â Gehenna beamed.
She rushed off to go next to the desk, while Tessa stayed on the bed, looking down at her feet. Lying on the ground was the photo that she took of Gehenna, except it only showed a dusty, darkened room lit by thin, weak slivers of sunlight. Of course it did. Gehenna was a vampire, her reflection wouldnât come out.
In a way, they both werenât human. Both of them were still alive without hearts. Both of them only met in the rose bush. It was as though they were both ghosts that would flicker away at any second and sitting on that bed, Tessa felt a dreadful, doom-ridden sense of finality.
âIt worked, but I only get two days with you. One day has already passed, itâs getting to be night now.â Gehenna said, getting up from behind the desk and holding a piece of wood that had two hearts in the middle, dried up and peeling a bit, two glittering necklaces strung about them.
Even though the hearts looked and smelled like they had been unearthed from the dirt, the necklaces still had their shine. Even though Gehenna grinned, Tessa could still see her lip twitch as though she wanted to cry and maybe never stop.
Tessa could feel it too: The end. Sheâd only have two days with Gehenna and then sheâd be back to nothingness. Why, just remembering all the lovely things about her life, about Gehenna, she couldnât imagine going back to feeling nothing, to thinking nothing.
âIf we can only have two days together, then letâs make it count. You said the ritual worked when you thought it was impossible, right? Well, maybe we can find a way to save the children from looking at spell books. Thatâs where you got the ritual from, isnât it? Maybe we can find an answer there.â Tessa said.
It felt sour and wrong to say those words, to talk as though Tessa were going to disappear any second and Gehenna would be all alone again. They never had a proper moment together, they needed more time, more peace, more anything.
âYes, I suppose so. The ritual was in one of the spell books upstairs, in the attic. We could go look in there to find the answer! Come on, letâs-do you want to take my hand?â Gehenna asked, her claw extended towards Tessa, yet a bit hesitantly.
Gehenna hadnât asked Tessa if she wanted to take her hand the whole day, but she didnât need to. Tessa felt as though things would only be made right if they were together, if they held one another. Her heart had been searching for Gehenna all along and the fact that Gehenna was asking in the moment showed Tessa that Gehenna was beginning to believe that she was real, that she didnât have to keep ushering her away like sheâd blink out of reality.
Tessa took Gehennaâs claw with a grin. The urgency was still there, but they had each other to help one another out. So, it almost looked as though they glided out of the room.
As though they were spirits trapped in a mirror, unable to be understood by others, but still seeing the beauty in one another.
If only they had forever.
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Hey there, creeperfeverdreams! This is Alex, back here with a review. I saw this series of yours had the least overall comments on it, so I wished to change that. Let's dive right in.
Chapter 1
A sweet beginning! I like how the reader is instantly pulled into this journey of self exploration to accompany Tessa. I loved how you used action 'a hand over her eyes as she stared' to aid the reader's imagination, sticking by the classic tactic of show, not tell. It almost feels like a person habit of Tessa, invoking a sense of familiarity with her. The image you paint of the manor was very captivating too! The dark rot, shattered windows and its poor condition, so much so that it could collapse anytime- are all so descriptive and fitting for a haunted manor. The imagery is quite vivid, along with her choice of glitter clothing. I can feel he's depicted as an outcast here, unaware of the perks of modern technology and lifestyle from her fascination of the camera and lack of sense of what a everyday outfit includes. It's very amusing how you mention the 'smell of wet roses' call out to her, repeatedly. I'm impressed by how oddly specific the detail is here. It attracts my attention again and again, if it is to have a significance in the plot to follow. There's a subtle implication of Tessa's history and connection with the manor as she intuitively approaches in in search of answers. She's as in the dark as the reader is, except for a unexplained tug she feels.
I don't think I come across such a well written chapter that often. It flows so effortlessly, with a hint of humor and suspense. The story is rooted in realism, while also discovers themes of a mysterious call of fate. There aren't cliched dialogues about talks of destiny, but a simple yearning for answers by Tessa. I liked how the title of this chapter conveys the likely possibility of the manor being Tessa's home, an unsure assumption the reader shares based on the way the chapter has been presented.
Chapter 2
I was fascinated at how this chapter upheld the suspense. We're revealed tiny things to tease us, but the real mystery is still curtained.
An interesting turn in the plot. When I usually walk towards a smell, it becomes stronger. But here, the exact opposite has happened- the smell has vanished altogether. Peculiar.. I'm curious as to what reason you'll use to justify this later.
The sunlight was an unexpected reminder, for some reason I was guessing it's night time. The way you illustrate s single beam of it to tell us it's been deserted for a while. The dust, rats, the cracking staircase and the spotted mirrors- all these elements made the setting are so very original and graphic.
The sudden memory was a great side puzzle to make the readers wonder. I like how Tessa shares the confusion with us, it makes her appear relatable as a character. The clues laid strongly suggest Tessa belongs here, as he feels a sense of familiarity with the people in the portraits. Her intuition is literally acting as her compass, certainly a unique way to uncover answers.
I realise now that I'm unaware what being she is. Is she a human girl who regained consciousness or a dead one who has now emerged as an angel soul? The narrative hasn't explicitly stated till now and I suppose it's intentional.
The last scene was a perfectly executed cliffhanger. The fear is so evidently described, I could feel it from the other side of the screen. The description of the hunched figure something is disturbing to say the least, I'm inclined to believe it's a vampire due to the choice of words. But I guess we'll know for sure soon enough.
Personally, I found the title a little ironic. She's almost attacked by a rat, the stairs are dangerously creaking, she finds a scary stranger- yet she finds it safe? I can get the familiar air to be oddly comforting, but it seems inaccurate.
Chapter 3
Bullseye! So it was a vampire afterall ^-^
It's so fascinating that the smell of wet roses was coming from her. I'm curious though, them why did it disappear when Tessa stepped in the manor? It's a little odd and nonsensical but I'm eager to see if you have a justification afterall.
I'm getting a hint of romance from these lines. It's so subtle and skillfully camouflaged though, I almost didn't catch it at first. It reminds me how when you're in love, even the fiercest lion appears a cute puppy. Such seems to be the case with Tessa here as she is oddly smitten with the otherwise frightening girl. I also love how it's written in a tender way, instead of the usual cheesy and cringe writing I often find some authors resorting to. It's quite heartwarming to read about their shared comfort and how it comes so naturally.
I'm a little frustrated by how close we are to the truth but it's still out of reach. The vampire girl being the voice in the memory she just saw was such an unforeseen twist, I'm totally impressed! She clearly knows something from her behaviour, but stops mid dialogue. You're really letting the suspense boil before the big reveal. Good for you, the wait makes me even more thrilled.
Chapter 4
Eating fuzzy green mold? O.o
Yeah, Tessa isn't a human, for sure
I think you meant 'shouting at her' or 'shouting out things' here. You might want to read it once again just to make sure . I could be wrong though!
This was endearing, in a very cute way. Not desperate, still wanting intimacy. I do think it's a little early though, as their relationship hasn't really been developed.
I think I'm starting to get why she referred to the manor as safe before. When you've faced hostility as she did in the diners, she isn't really looking for love and affection, but stability and calmness. It's sad to realise how little she desires from life, after the bad experiences with humanity. The lost girl truly had no way other than to steal.
I believe so much is going on here, even more than the commotion at the diners. We see the girl carries the energy of the manor, or at least Tessa certainly feels that way. It can be an unexpected affect of Tessa's latent affection for her. It's also shattering to perceive what's happening from the girl's perspective. It's clear from the phrasing these two have a intimate past, but Tessa can't seem to recall any of it. It must be so heartbreaking for her as an obvious loved one, to see Tessa doesn't remember any of their cherished memories they had made. At the same time, we see Tessa struggling with her uncontrollable emotions which make her care for the girl. She's still not used to the feeling, and fumbles to get a hold over them.
Seems like Tessa might be human afterall? Just a desperately hungry one lol
I did think the part about the girl just being a gracious host was a little overboard though. But in their defense, Tessa must've looked really famished after craving food for this long.
I love how we're finally given some backstory but most of the secrets are still in the bag. Now an even bigger question has been raised- how did Tessa really die? And if she did, what does that make her now- a zombie or an angel? I'm guessing the later from the title,but you never know! At least we know both their names now- Taliyah and Gehenna, that's got to account for something.
Chapter 5
This chapter had a lot of lore. There are some starlight angels who require the sacrifice of kids for blood, and Gehenna's family complies with their wishes to prevent their own kin from becoming prey. Seeing the plot not for what it objectively was, but how it seemed to affect Gehenna was quite moving. She's devastated by the horrible actions she witnessed and it apparent from her broken state. I think it made the narrative so much more powerful and amplified the illustration of pain from a emotional lens.
I'm absolutely in love with how humanly flawed your characters are! Tessa is awkward and not an expert at consoling others. She overthinks about messing it and the nervousness reminds of her terrible experience at the diners, scratching at healed wounds.
A cunning reference to a previous chapter. It's so subtly written, I was proud at myself for catching that! The simiIe is so innovative, I've never seen someone shift gears this smooth so quick.
I think you meant 'felt like a loop'? Also, I felt a little lost here. I think as the manor is haunted so Gehenna's voice seemed to echo and as she felt a little lifeless, Tessa felt she was holding s skeleton. If this is indeed what you meant, I think the phrasing needed some more clarity as I almost missed it.
It's so fascinating to see Gehenna's actions contradict and betray her words. It really adds complexity to her character and shows how naturally she is pulled to Taliyah, despite her wanting to pull away.
My thoughts exactly! I don't think I've ever read a work with such a relatable protagonist, she's so realistic. Her voice validates my doubts, as she herself struggles with them as well.
Chapter 6
A rather relevant query! I'm surprised how it didn't come to me before.
They had a very heartening backstory indeed. Tessa was almost like a escape to Gehenna, a way for her to be lively and smile. Now it makes sense why the smell of wet roses appealed to her, it must have stuck with her from her last day, in the rain. I wonder what shall go down now, now that Tessa seems to have regained her memories. But this far, I'm completely impressed to how well you've built and planned their story. The pacing is gradual, slowly revealing layers without making the reader lose interest. Keep up the great work!
A chilling end! I'm really curious now that Tessa is already dead and Gehenna has been turned into a vampire, what worse could they possibly do?
Chapter 7
Just an incredible plot twist! I had been eager to see where this character would lead to ever since she was introduced but her being Gehenna's sister was next level. The entire purpose of the Marwood family sacrificing other kids were to protect their own family, so why'd they offer their own daughter? It's an intriguing mystery and you definitely have my attention.
I believe this was a typing mistake. The word 'made' doesn't belong, I think you should remove it.
It's so heartbreaking to see Gehenna feel responsible for the kids' death even if she had no part to play in it. This tells us she is, indeed, a good soul. It makes her ache feel all the more personal to the reader.
It was so touching to see Tessa and Gehenna finally admit their feelings for each other. After the ambiguity they've been dealing with all these chapters, it feels severely well deserved.
A spooky cliffhanger! I'm curious to see if the evil has really followed them. And if it has, how will the girl react and handle the situation. We've seen them make their way through difficult conversations and haunting memories, it's be refreshing to see them approach and counter a tussle. It shall tell us how they respond to various cases, making their personalities all the more dynamic.
Chapter 8
This chapter finally revealed how Tessa was back from the dead, by explaining the elaborate ritual. Their reunion is so tragic, meant to last just two days. Even against the ticking clock, Tessa thinks of saving the kids instead of living them with her beloved, she's a figure of ultimate selflessness.
This closing line does such a great job of making the reader their was an alternate dimension in which their love could last longer. The characters are so likeable, we're not ready to bid goodbye to them just yet. Even the thought of them being pulled away by fate again is so devastating.
Overall, this is such a well written piece about two young lovers reconciling after one's death. It has lore about some starlit angels and I'm eager to see if the later plot digs deeper into them. We're still not revealed the reason why Briena was sacrificed. I'm specifically curious to find out if she makes a return to the story as well. I do think the romance was a little hurried and unripe from being introduced too early, but it also feels justified given their past history and compatibility in life. There's an engaging mystery, an unexplained familiarity and a pleasant love story to pull at the reader's heartstrings- what not to like? Apart from some of the small typos, I could find no major suggestions! It really looks great. My favourite aspect of it would have to be Tessa's relatability, though. She's realistic and imperfect, unlike most of the lead characters I read about. Even Gehenna is an emotional wreck, giving her a humane touch. It was a delightful read, my pleasure to review it. Hope I manage to get to the next chapters very soon.
Yes, I%u2019ve written more about them! Thank you for your review!
Hey there creeperfeverdreams, Lim here with a review! Gosh this was really so interesting. My first impressions were that this world and story feel really surreal. It's a world that seemingly just has diners, clothing shops and the mysterious manor within it, and Tessa's actions at times seem impulsive, like they are driven by dream logic, if that makes sense. I really started to get hooked around Chapter 4, when Gehenna and Tessa have this conversation about the cake:
Gehenna bringing out a rotten cake and not expecting her to eat it is a good example of the parts that reminded me of dream logic. I also feel the symbolism in this quote, like Gehenna is comparing herself to the moldly cake, which is really so tragic.
I'll continue this review with some specific comments for certain chapters where things stood out to me.
Chapter 1
Another thing that made me feel like this was a surrealist story was how little internal monologue Tessa has upon waking up. She doesn't really freak out or ask questions - instead she just kind of lets her emotions and intuitions guide her from place to place.
The idea of "metallic carriages" stood out to me and made me think this setting wasn't set in an ordinary world. It also has a kind of unsettling vibe since I usually think of carriages as being made out of wood or something friendlier than metal.
I was also asking myself - how is she such a good thief? How many clothes and how much food did she manage to steal? (Especially since we find out later than this all takes place over one day!)
Chapter 4
I like how the interior of the manor is described here. The details feel like they all connect together and the prose flows nicely. The line about "stillness" is also really poetic and conveys Tessa's indescribable longing that she doesn't have an explanation for until later.
I like the blocks of italic text and how they're written.
The stream-of-consciousness parts in this story I generally thought were really good. The lack of punctuation when the name is repeated makes it feel like she's desperately trying to jog her memory, and this emotion also comes through with the long run-on sentence.
Chapter 5
I like how without comment, we see Gehenna slip into treating Tessa like Taliyah. I feel like it definitely stirs up curiosity to find out if Tessa really is Taliyah after all, as we get to know the life they shared together.
I'm not sure about the description of Gehenna's voice as "sing-song" though. It's hard for me to imagine someone talking in a "sing-song" voice without being mocking, and especially not for such a long time and it doesn't feel like mocking is what Gehenna is doing here.
Chapter 6
I really like how you interwove Gehenna's telling of the story with Tessa's memories coming back to her. I feel like it heightened the emotions to see Gehenna's grief contrasted with Tessa's feelings of love.
Chapter 8
When I read this, I was like oh no. This is such a good twist though, and it makes a lot of Gehenna's previous behaviour make sense. 1. She didn't think it would work, so she's still quite surprised and unsure when she first encounters Tessa. 2. She continues treating her like Taliyah even if she said to herself that she shouldn't - after all, having Taliyah back is something she desperately wished for, even sacrificing her heart for this.
Additionally, I like the chapter titles! They feel really poignant and I like how they escalate from being kind of mundane in the beginning to being way more intense and on point with the story as it unfolds. It sort of reminds me of the episode titles in an anime I watched ages ago, Madoka Magica.
Overall, I enjoyed reading this story and am hoping to review the rest of Part One soon-ish. It feels tragic at the moment, though in the way I like. I sympathise with both characters and I feel I'm rooting for them to find some way out of this in the spellbooks.
Hope this helps, and keep writing!
-Lim
I%u2019m so glad you enjoyed and saw a dreamlike quality to it. I was kind of going for something surreal and tragic. The metal carriages are only cars, it%u2019s just that Tessa is from a completely different time period and doesn%u2019t recognize cars.
Hey! Hereâs what I think!
I really believe that Tessa and Gehenna are super well-crafted characters, each with their own special qualities and emotional paths that totally pull you in. Their interactions reveal so much about their pasts, making them both relatable and fascinating. The manor is such a cool visual part of the story, with its old charm reflecting the struggles the characters face. The detailed descriptions really make you feel like youâre in the setting. Tessaâs quest for self-discovery and safety is really clear and connects well, driving the story forward. However, making her ultimate goal a bit clearer could make it even more engaging. Overall, itâs amazing! I canât wait to find out what happens next!
I%u2019m so glad you enjoyed this! Here are the rest of the chapters: Cemetery angels can love too [Part One] (Continued) đ¤đď¸đŞ˝
I made a sequel!
Cemetery angels can love too [Part Two] đđŞŚđĽ
Ooo thx!
You%u2019re welcome and I made these origins as well!:
Gehennaâs origin: Cemetery angels đŤđˇď¸
Taliyahâs origin: Cemetery angels đđ§đ˝ââď¸
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