*This song/poem is under my folder titled “Kyla and Talia’s journey”. Characters are under my forum titled “My character designs<33”. Enjoy!*
Aleron, the angel
He fell for a human named Lunria
Thalassa, the demon
She fell for a human named Dyrk
Both fell in love in the winter
When they were only teens
Aleron and Thalassa knew each other not
But both wished for a peaceful life all the same
They married those they loved
And were pleased to have children
Aleron and Lunria had Kyla
Thalassa and Dyrk had Talia
Kyla and Talia, close friends, unaware of what they were
Their parents kept it at bay
In hopes that they would get to live more happily
But it all comes rushing back in the end
The truth always comes to light
It’s up to Talia and Kyla to never break in strife
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Hello Hello, I hope you dont mind me popping in with a quick review. I will apologize as I don't think I've read some of the other installments. However, I still hope you can enjoy my thoughts regardless of my possibly getting some things wrong. With that being said let's get into it shall, we?
Overall I found this a fun little poem. I feel there's a lot of story to tell when it comes to the setup. The child of an angel befriends the child of a demon and seems they cant keep their human ruse for long. It is for sure a fun dynamic to play off throughout the series and it poses a lot of good questions.
I definitely wonder what this universe's angels and demons are like. This was probably fleshed out in the other parts but I find the ways folks interpret them super interesting in general. Furthermore, I wonder in what ways the past is catching up on them. So far I must say you have once again caught my attention.
I am also getting starcrossed lover vibes between the kids perhaps when they're older. However, friendship would be just as meaningful when it comes to the themes I'm picking up. Togetherness and putting aside grudges are ones I think fit super well for sure.
Now once again I would normally jump into feedback but I couldn't find anything so I will wrap things up instead.
I might check out the others in this story as I'm intrigued about where this goes. I hope you have a good day or night during this hectic time. As always keep writing and remember to drink water!
I%u2019m so glad you enjoyed and yes, there is more to come!
This time of year is very fun but busy lol.
They say men are the children of two forces...
It's a cute , small story about two different species having children and then those children being great friends.
I wonder if the angel and demon duked it out on the background while the kids played -wheeze-
Hi there!
This was a little hard for me to understand, but I read through it a few times. I think this is so cute, but it does have a meaning. Now, I don't understand the meaning, but I get the gist. Overall, I didn't see anything major that needed to be fixed. It's written well and it's simple. I just wish I understood it better :')
Keep it up though! Good job!
~Taost