Gone from exsistence.

Sad :'(
Didn't get a chance to review. If you choose to put it back up at some point I would be happy to look it for you!

-Carly

Hey there cold, I'm here pulling a Bogalicious and reviewing this;)

I must say, this piece of, apparently, action-adventure, was quite deep and poetic in an unexpected and innovative way. The lack of any content, paired with the title, 'gone from existence', raises some very deep and interesting metaphysical questions about the meaning of existence and reality. It makes you think, which not many recent novels can achieve. So fantastic, you certainly have a knack for philosophy!

Your grammar and spelling were also top-notch, which rounded this off quite nicely.

I hope to see more from you eventually, and keep up the great work!
~Italian

Hello C&L, this is my first review, so bare with me...

I liked your chapter here. Your grammar was pretty good... I have a couple of suggestions though:

About half way through this chapter you started writing Bad's name with a capital B, but before that it was written 'bad'. Make sure you capitalize names, even if they're words that you usually don't capitalize.

At this part:

"“How close” he said with a hint of excitement."

You need to add a question mark after the word 'close'.

There were some random places where you dropped commas or something but I'm not going to go and point out every one. Just read through it carefully and you can probably find them yourself.

As for the overall piece, I like it, but there were places you could use more description.

"We repeated this process for almost an hour,"

Here you can express how long and painful that hour felt to your narrator. I know you already had some description of the torture, but there's nothing wrong with adding more.

"“In your ass!” I said loudly."

I think a descriptive word like 'shouted' or "hollard" would work better then "said loudly".

Keep writing! I'd be glad to review chapter two when it comes along!