Okay, just for the record I didn't write this, our drummer did so I'll forward all complaints to him
Neway, here's the lyrics for "Forgotton Friendship"
Who's that outside
I think its a girl I once knew
Are you sure it's her?
'Cos if it was I'd thought I'd remember
She keeps looking at me
It's as if shes known me forever
And if I'd seen her before
I'd never of forgotton that smile on her face
So she turns away
And I'm sure she keeps turning my way
There's a tear in her eye
And she whispers a name I've never heard before
You know I hate to ask
But why is it you keep staring
If I'd ask your name
Would I regret smoking that cigarette
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Thank you for reading, the song is mainly in G chord, but the lead guitarist plays in drop B
All criticism will be read, and not used as firewood
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Thanks for all your comments. I have forwarded all criticism to our drummer. Snoink, Menimor aka. Many More is our band name, and I didn't know what the last line was about either, but he said something about a kiss, and the fact that she wouldn't touch him if she realised he smoked.
^ should be she's i.e. with an apostrophe.
^ should be 'have' and not 'of' - annoyingly common mistake, that...
apart from that the only thing i can find fault with is the lack of commas, full-stops etc. but this wouldn't really be noticable while you were singing, only if you wrote the words out.
i agree with adam; what's up with the last line. if there's a specific reason it's not so bad but it seems sorta weird...
~KayJuran~
Fine, except... it's spelled "Memoirs" if you're refering to memories. It's French.
Moved to the Lyrics section.
I like it, all accept the last line, just didnt work for me. Sorry for being so briedf but yes, enjoyable read, be even better in song. Nice work.