Thankful

This plot is really sweet, straight and beautiful in it's own way. It uniquely talks about one's dependence on god and the sense of graitude.
The whole poem delivers a very good feeling!
Job well done, cheers!

Hey there, Chances! You left a review request on my wall, so I'm here to take you up on it.

First off, welcome to YWS! I hope that you like it here as much as I do. If you have any questions about anything, feel free to ask me or any of the other YWSers and we'll help you out in any way that we can, okay? Great. Now, on to the review!

Overall, this is a cute poem. You were able to get your point across, and your end product was a sweet, encouraging little poem. Nice work. That being said, I do have a few suggestions.

Is this poem supposed to rhyme? In some parts, it's obvious that you were trying to achieve rhymes.

"Praying to help you out
And magically eases the doubt."

"The answer has arrived,
That in the end of the day
You're more than satisfied"

Personally, I feel that this poem would be better off if you wrote it in free-verse format and entirely skipped trying to make it rhyme. I have sort of a love/hate relationship with rhyming poems. When they're done perfectly, they're amazing to read. But if not, the poem comes off feeling overworked, as if the author was more focused on trying to make the poem rhyme than anything else.

"In times when you're rushing
And feel like crying,
With all the pressure
And the time that runs fast."

I'm not sure about the last two lines, namely the part about "the time that runs fast." It feels off to me. If I were you, I'd rewrite it in a way resembling the following:

"In times when you're rushing
and feel like crying,
when you're under pressure
and time's flying by."

I don't claim to be a poet. Poems are not my area of expertise at all. But whether you're writing chapters, short stories, or poems, your words still need to have a flow about them. Eliminating unnecessary usages of words like "the" will help you out.

This poem definitely has potential. It's obvious to me that the feelings behind this poem are very important to you. When any author feels strongly about something, feels that it's important enough to justify writing about, they've already taken the first step towards writing something awesome. That's how I feel, anyway.

Remember, the suggestions I've made are just that: suggestions. If you don't agree with them, disregard them. At the end of the day, your opinion concerning your work is paramount. Your unique opinions and views are what will separate you from other authors and make your work unique. Don't sacrifice them for anything.

Nice work! Always keep writing.

-Rose

I really enjoyed this poem. Some of the tenses threw me off a little while reading. For example, the second sentence, I think you should put "feel" instead of "felt". Also, in the first sentence, a minor mistake of "your" instead of "you're".

This poem could be in a book somewhere after a few minor touchups. Really great job how you connected with the reader, I feel the same way all the time! The beautifulness and sincerity of it shone through very radiantly. It was just a comfortable poem read, one that makes you happy when you're done reading it. (round of applause!!!!)

Nice Work, Keep Up the Awesomeness!:)

I like this poem a lot. It has a sort of christian feel to it, and I like that about the peice. It could use more vivid words and maybe a little more feeling, but I can definitely see a great poem in the making! The flow was wonderful, and the structure was great. Keep it up, love

Nice work. The poem has a nice flow, the narration simple. The concept is refreshing. The way you describe the hard times is a bit unconventional which is good. The way one's dependence of god increases when he faces the odds of life is also good. The resolution part of the poem has given it a wonderful feeling. The whole poem seems to be lively by the way it has been ended. Keep up the good work and cheers!