Hey! Forever here with a review!!
This was a cool story but I was very confused in the end. Okay so first of all, with the title. I found no similarity between plague and the story. The story is about a completely different matter than the title. The story talks about zombies and how humans were trying to fight the zombies. I really couldn't link the story to its title.
Anyway, next we have the plot. In the beginning we saw that there were two people and they were trying to move from one place to another; if I am not very wrong in search of food(I guessed it due to the mention of supermarket). That was a pretty good start. Then they found a house and then the house opened, the owner told them to come in. Till this much is very clear to me but what happened afterwards staright away went above my head. From what it seemed to me, the people living in that place were trying to kill them or at least render them unconscious. I really don't understand why it must be so. Was it a result od selfishness? Like the people didn't want to help them or something? Perhaps. I am not at all sure.
Whatever it is, it came way too abruptly. Maybe you meant it to be a plot twist or something but honestly, it didn't come as a very good one. At least please clarify and ecpound on what was really happening there. It wouldn't be a bad plot twist if we think of the concept but the way it was presented destroyed it. The flow was completely disrupted.
Next I would like to talk a bit about the characters. There was little or almost no character development. The only thing we saw is that both the characters were very afraid and Alana was impatient too. I think there could be more character development. Like you could ppetray Damian as a brave person and make him less afraid. I understand that it's a very difficult task to develop characters in a short story but still it can be done. It's not impossible.
I liked the world building here. You could work a bit more on the descriptions though. Like how did the house in the supermarket look? etc. Overall, this had a good beginning and concept too but it needs some changes.
Keep Writing!!
~Forever
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