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I love it! Aaaaah! It’s just amazing!

This is a successful and nice one and of would sincerely say I love it and the way and structure in which you laid the poem in is really amazing and its very very good. Also, I think what kept me hooked up on this poem and still reading it is because the language of the poem is low and not high sounding and so It is quiet easy to read and actually comprehend in everyway.
I would like to drop a review like this and I think you should go with what I'm about to say if you would. I think It would be good to start by saying that if this is a poem and sure it is and for the fact that it is very long one, then you need not just write in a one full meter. I was taught and I know too that no matter your tone or mood, or even why you write, long poems must always be grouped a in be in "VERSES AND STANZAS" but that is that if you like it.
Again, I want to appreciate your simplicity of diction in the poem, but like it, I don't know if you meant to structure it that way, but the beginning wasn't all that romantic, but the end. I think if you are serious in a poem, you should just go in with one point and not try to change it or switch ideas inbetween lines, which may be contrastory or even contradictory.
The first lines were you fumming as though you have no feeling and as if the relationship was over, but in the other lines below, it was now as if you were trying to rekindle that fire which you tried putting out on the start and so it then seemed to contradict your original idea.
Most of the times, coded languages may not be all that good . i think the Main aim and title of this poem was to put it o notice that maybe you are no longer interested or so, but as I read further and read you trying to comparing his love or whatever to some certain animal creature.
You said it wasnt the "would end in wedding", but then, you talk as if it would. Please know that I'm not trying to spoil things here for you, all I want is to give a pointful review and if its bad I'm sorry about it.
I wouldn't say I'm all that good and I believe you have read some of my poems and I believe you would do more than this if you just try out what have said.
It was a nice one and I enjoyed it, thank you.

Hey!! Might I ask how you are doing today? Hopefully you're doing very well! I've come to leave a review on this spectacular poem. I have a lot to say, but I'm not exactly awesome at writing reviews! So I'll try my very best to formulate my thoughts, and hopefully you get something out of this!

I need to start by saying this is some phenomenal work! In the beginning, I thought it was going to be a romantic poem, most likely about people who fall in love and confess, and other things of that sort. But when I really began reading, I was delightfully surprised and so very impressed! The idea that they love each other so much, but as FRIENDS, is an idea I've always personally cherished. And finding a poem that completely describes it using beautiful words and descriptions that float right off the page and turn into an image in my head? That makes me so happy!

I absolutely ADORE the line where you said: Laughing about that one time one of us did something so outrageous, That it lives on in inside jokes and coded language. I love this line because THIS is what I want in a relationship and friendship, and this is what I love!! I relate to this on SO many levels, especially with my best friends. You captured this so perfectly, and I congratulate you on that!

While I do love that line, my favorite lines by far are the last three. When you say: So maybe my love is romantic, But only because I am a poet, And everything is love to me. That is SO beautiful, perfect, inspirational, lovely, and I could go on and on gushing about it! It's the most perfect ending I have ever heard, and if I could give you a trophy, I would.

I'm closing off by saying that I LOVE this poem. You did an amazing job. Please keep writing poems like this. Keep up the amazing work!!

Hey!

First of all, I love how you narrated a little story through your poem.

I also think your title was apt and perfect for the poem. It draws the attention of the reader with a slightly mysterious tone.

I really liked this part:

You haven't doused my heart in kerosine

Struck your match

Set me ablaze

And simply walked away, leaving me to burn.

No you have stayed and tended to my heart.

The only error I found was that you misspelt kerosene; you've spelt it as kerosine.

On the whole, I really liked the simple incidents you describe. Honestly, I'm kinda jealous that you have such a good friend.

Can't wait to read more of your work.

Keep writing.

Hey there! MapleWay here dropping by with a quick review!

Before I begin the review I want to say welcome to the site! YWS is a wonderful place and I hope you can enjoy it to its full potential! Anyways, onto the review!

This was amazing! I really liked the way you bought a story into it. It felt as if I was along for the ride! I could really feel all of the emotion you put into it. If I'm being honest it made me feel as if I have known the friendship of you guys for a while. That's how I know it is such a good poem! Great job! Tag me if you do another poem! (If you don't know how to tag I can tell you)