Hey! Thank you for your follow. I saw your cry for help at Reviewing like a wind. Poetry mostly. 
Just thought I'd check it out for you 
The first thing that came to me when I read this poem is that it needs further proofreading. I've found three types of mistakes worth mentioning. Here they are:
But why do people keeps on doing
the main verb isn't in the infinitive form
But a seed can be nurture,
"Nurture" is a verb, not an adjective.
That brings joy and life-new hope
You haven't ended the sentence.
There's some more mistakes that can easily be noticed with a focused eye. But what I think doesn't work here is that you used a formal structure to let out an informal speech. I'd suggest you look up other types of structure. I've found this can be helpful for you in terms of choosing the formal structure suiting you better: Capitalization in Poetry
Message-wise, I agree with @pastelqueen. I'd just like to mention this type of font doesn't really work out for me, the w's look like v's and it looks messy and formal at the same time. I don't know how you set it, though, so would you please explain to me how have you changed the default font? I'm really curious about formatting in YWS...
Well, I hope my opinion encourages you to keep writing these poems. I can honestly see some deepness that'll allow you to write great pieces. Just don't forget to proofread
It can be tricky sometimes, I know, but that's something you can only master with practice. The Great Grammar Compendium is one of the biggest references on the website, but why not take a look in the viewforum.php?f=320 ?Okay, keep it up!
-TheGatherer
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