Hi, this is Leela here for a review. I am not good at reviewing. I will just say what I felt.
This is a good poem. But I do agree with others that it lack emotion. I don't have ADD and had never heard of it. So I had trouble understanding what it is and why you feel all this pain. I think it would be better if you add some more details. You say you face problems.
You would have done a great job if you had said what they are.
I loved the imagery in the line about dam. I have been through some tough times and had felt like a dam about to burst, like I couldn't bear anymore. It really suits the situation.
There are lot of mispelt words(For example,"contral' for " control" and "aford" for "afford"). It kind of stopped me in middle and wonder what you really meant to say. You could always see preview before publishing. It would have helped avoid these errors.
With some imagery and details this poem would have been great.
Keep writing.
Points: 203
Reviews: 6
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