Hey art99! DrLavender here to do a quick review for you! I hope you may find my notes to be of some use to you.
The song has yet to be sung
An interesting opening line! I mean this in a good way of course, because it captured my interest and made me want to read the rest.
You who have
Repeatedly untangled my spirit
From where it lay spilt on the concrete.
Great way of invoking emotion! I couldn't help but feel a bit of sympathy and sadness because of the "From where it lay split on the concrete", but it also invoked hope because the spirit claims to be untangled.
Who else has mended my wings
And taught me how to soar?
A great ending! I particularly enjoy how you allude to birds in this, and even make yourself one in this poem. I like the romantic connection, it really brings out emotion and interest.
Overall, this was great! I can't help but follow you, because I want to see more of what you post.
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