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Aw, this was a cute little piece here. There was also so much truth in it! I loved how you started with the image of people having phantom feet that stretch out of the universe. Your use of the word "little bodies" really works well to convey the idea that God is so much greater than these little human beings here on earth. This poem really illustrates the grandeur of God's greatness and majesty. I really loved that part!
I also love the wistful thoughts that one day children will grow to adults and build homes on the graves of others. However, I also interpreted it as the knowledge and principles that this age teaches to the next is what the next will use to build families and make decisions.
Overall, beautifully written! Loved it.
-Kaia
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I think this poem is about wanting to pursue knowledge and questioning faith. This is evident in lines such as “searching for a platform tall enough to reach the whole world” (the speaker is searching for an explanation, the meaning of life).
I liked the figurative language used in the poem, such as:
I think you could improve on the flow of these two lines:
I feel that this does not flow with the rest of the poem and slows the reader down.
I hope my review could be helpful! Keep up the good work!
—GengarIsBestBoy
What a sweet little piece of writing this was. Moreover, it was so replete with veracity. Your opening vision of people's phantom feet extending into infinity was brilliant. God is infinitely more impressive than little humans like us, and your use of the word "little bodies" to describe us is spot on. The greatness and majesty of God are well depicted in this poem. That was the best part, by far!
I also find comfort in the melancholy notion that someday kids will be adults and make houses out of graveyards. But I also took it to mean that the future generation will base their families and decisions on the values and information that our generation imparts to them. basketball stars
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