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First Love

by alpacaboss


When I first saw you, I knew I loved you already.

You were my first love, the person who showed me what love is/

My smile will soar when you laugh at the most mundane things.

Even if I was making a fool out of myself, I would do anything to keep you smile.

My heart will sink when you cry.

Nothing, no one, should hurt you. Ever.

When you would ask me for something,

I would give it to you, even if I desperately wanted it.

Seeing you happy is worth more

Than if a million diamonds were given to me.

I treasured you so much

And I would do anything for you.

But that fateful day, you were taken away from me. 

So swift, so abrupt, I didn't even have a chance to mourn.

You were the closest friend I had, the one I loved the most.

Who said first love had to be romantic?

My first love was you, my dearest sister.

My only sister.

You were an angel on earth and Heaven saw it fit to bring you home.

I miss you.

I love you...


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Thu Sep 05, 2024 9:21 pm
theromanticchemist wrote a review...



Hi alpacaboss, coming here to give you a review for this amazing, yet heartbreaking, poem. First of all, if this poem is from your own point of view, I’m so sorry for your loss. It seems like your sister meant a lot to you, and you show that in this poem.
I love how you almost tricked the reader--you make it seem at first like it’s about teenage love, but of course, it’s about a familial love. You describe how you show that you love your sister well, showing how you would do anything for her and how you yearn to see her happy. That comes across very well in this piece.
You also show the mourning very well too--how it was so sudden, and so sad. I really felt for the narrator at that point, it was almost like whiplash.
I have no criticism for this piece--the grammar and mechanics are done very well, as well as the style. You are a talented writer, and I really want to read more of your work.
<3, Meenal (theromanticchemist)




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Thu Sep 05, 2024 5:02 pm
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I have no words. You have expressed these emotions so beautifully, Its wonderful in simple words.

"You were the closest friend I had, the one I loved the most.
Who said first love had to be romantic?
My first love was you, my dearest sister.
My only sister."
Yes, our first love is not always our 'lover', it can be our 'loved ones', and when you make your loved ones happy its like the most proud moment ever in your life, being happy and spreading happiness. Our siblings can be our friend, our secret keepers and many more, they can always read us like an open book. When have no one around us to support us, to comfort us, it is our loved ones who are there, in our tough as well as happy times.

"You were an angel on earth and Heaven saw it fit to bring you home.
I miss you"
I cannot imagine my life without my closest friend, without my loved ones. I can bring everything for them if they are at the stake of losing something, anything they ask. I can shed tears for them, I can laugh on silly jokes for them, I can do anything and everything for them. I am also starting to miss your sister, she seems to be so pure and angelic.

Keep it up.
Waiting for more.
Thank you.




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Thu Sep 05, 2024 4:55 pm
KaavyaK says...



Fantastic poem written by the author.

I have no words. You have expressed these emotions so beautifully, its just fantastic in simple words.

"You were the closest friend I had, the one I loved the most.
Who said first love had to be romantic?
My first love was you, my dearest sister.
My only sister."
Yes, our first love is not always our 'lover', it can be our 'loved ones', and when you make your loved ones happy its like the most proud moment ever in your life, being happy and spreading happiness. Our siblings can be our friend, our secret keepers and many more, they can always read us like an open book. When have no one around us to support us, to comfort us, it is our loved ones who are there, in our tough as well as happy times.

"You were an angel on earth and Heaven saw it fit to bring you home.
I miss you"
I did not expect the ending to be so emotional and heart touching. I cannot imagine my life without my closest friend, the person whom I love, for that person I do anything and everything. I am also starting to miss your sister, its seems like she was really an angel.

Keep it up.
Waiting for more.
Thank you.





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