Hi alpacaboss, coming here to give you a review for this amazing, yet heartbreaking, poem. First of all, if this poem is from your own point of view, I’m so sorry for your loss. It seems like your sister meant a lot to you, and you show that in this poem.
I love how you almost tricked the reader--you make it seem at first like it’s about teenage love, but of course, it’s about a familial love. You describe how you show that you love your sister well, showing how you would do anything for her and how you yearn to see her happy. That comes across very well in this piece.
You also show the mourning very well too--how it was so sudden, and so sad. I really felt for the narrator at that point, it was almost like whiplash.
I have no criticism for this piece--the grammar and mechanics are done very well, as well as the style. You are a talented writer, and I really want to read more of your work.
<3, Meenal (theromanticchemist)
Points: 21
Reviews: 38
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