Raise Your Glasses of Guilt

Hello, there! Avi here with a review

I'm reviewing using the YWS S'more Method today!

Top Graham Cracker - What I Know
Just from the title, I knew this would be a brilliant piece. The alliteration is lovely, and it reminded me of Hamilton. Just comparing "raise a glass to freedom" to "raise your glasses of guilt" hit me in the gut. Spectacular job with the title if nothing else (spoiler: there's a lot more of amazingness in this piece, so well done indeed).

Slightly Burnt Marshmallow - Room for Improvements
I have none, this is lovely.

Chocolate Bar - Highlights of the Piece
Lemme just say, the line "Or maybe I’m still justifying a man who never needed an excuse" hit so hard. I hate it when this happens, and I know I'm not alone. Thank you for putting it into words.

Also, "But I’m grown up now. I’ve looked through both sides of the cup, despite it being crafted from glass—as if seeing it from a different angle could change what’s inside. I recognize you for who you are, and you’re not someone I wish to forgive, yet somehow, for some reason, I still let go of it." is beautiful <333

Closing Graham Cracker - Closing Thoughts
This is a brilliant piece, filled with regret, sorrow, and that soul-deep aching that adults tend to feel is secluded to children and are disappointed or upset with themselves for feeling. Well done, Cupe!!! <333

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I haven't read your work in a while and I forgot how much I enjoy reading it! Now shall we dive in?
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I know I’m lying to myself because that little kid inside me still wishes it were.

I recognize you for who you are, and you’re not someone I wish to forgive, yet somehow, for some reason, I still let go of it.

Maybe you searched for it in the fizz of your beer, the way the bubbles clung to the glass. Maybe you thought you could drown it, swallow it down with each sip.

and hearing the click of our... my seatbelt.

This is phenomenal. I will try to elaborate to the best i can. First, the narrative is very heavy, something i enjoy very much. Second, the details are given in such a laidback yet concise manner its artful.

'The failing sun', can be compared with an authoritative power that is incapable of doing its job. In this case, the father.

The sentence,' I’ve looked through both sides of the cup, despite it being crafted from glass', can be interpreted as an obsessive compulsive attitude and/or a neurodevelopmental disorder maybe caused by 'the failing sun'.

Using my instead of ours in,'hearing the click of our... my seat belt.' can be an example of how the sun is failing and/or may lead to a continuation story.

The use of the Chevrolet Suburban [if I'm not wrong] can be suggestive of how much authority or space the sun takes in the mindscape of the narrator even though its is failing every day. Like you said. it is taking a rising stand.

I am certain i missed many other things, but don't be let down. The only concern i could possibly have is that heavy narratives are often the creation of burdened minds. Take care.

AbsCon