To feel your touch
To hear your voice
To see your eyes
As they gaze into mine
Is a heaven I cannot describe
Is it pure joy?
Or it's the love that makes my ears hot
It must just be you
You and your charm
Your love,
I crave it so deeply
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Despite how short and simple this poem is, it really has a lot of meaning behind it.
''To feel your touch
To hear your voice
To see your eyes
As they gaze into mine
Is a heaven I cannot describe
Is it pure joy?''
That feeling is all too relatable. I feel like every time I look at someone, that I like, 'OMG, THEY'RE LOOKING AT ME!'
Maybe because I'm so DE lulu.
''Or it's the love that makes my ears hot''
Again, such a relatable line.
''You and your charm
Your love,
I crave it so deeply''
I would be suggest at the end of, 'I crave it so deeply', you could put, ''almost like a drug''.
Very good poem, keep it up!
Hi! This poem is beautiful! I love 'Is it pure joy?' because I love a good rhetorical question. The repetition of 'To ___ your' at the start really emphasises the emotions, and the feeling of craving something, as the title suggests. The final line ties everything together, and it is a truly excellent poem. Sorry I'm really bad at reviews, but I don't really have anything else to say, and most of what I'm saying is probably waffle anyway. Keep up your amazing work!
I definitely will continue to write, especially after all the support here on YWS! Thank you for your review and support, I really love putting rhetorical questions in my poems for some reason lol.
Hi! This poem is beautiful! I love 'Is it pure joy?' because I love a good rhetorical question. The repetition of 'To ___ your' at the start really emphasises the emotions, and the feeling of craving something, as the title suggests. The final line ties everything together, and it is a truly excellent poem. Sorry I'm really bad at reviews, but I don't really have anything else to say, and most of what I'm saying is probably waffle anyway. Keep up your amazing work!
holy rizz dude, you should show her this lowkeyyy
Its so cringey tho %uD83D%uDC94
nah, just straight rizz dude