The Scourge of a Sonneteer

Wow! Can I just say you have quite the mastery of old English word choice, I'm seriously impressed. Most of the time people attempt to do this they can't keep it up the whole time so there's a problem with consistency or it comes off really cliché or fake. You succeeded in really making this seem like an authentic good-old sonnet. Not very many people post sonnets on YWS, so I am probably not very adept at reviewing them, but I will give it a shot.

Wording & Grammar
I'm laughing at wisegirl's comment below about the words "being from the 1960's" .

Again let me just praise your word choice! You really must have worked very hard to not only have such controlled language but then also have the references to the "Lethe" river of Hades, and the Greek Muse of comedy "Thalia".
As far as grammar, I'm not familiar with sonnets enough to know whether the first line of every line must be capitalized, but if it isn't necessary I would suggest taking out some of the capitals that aren't necessary.

Really I only have two suggestions or differing opinions with your grammar choices.
1) I have an extreme dislike for the use of ellipses, in my opinion it makes lines seem unfinished and are distracting to the overall look of a poem what they add to the poem are a sort of feeling of longing or waiting for the next line. But in my opinion when you already have such a visually clean poem it's not worth it to have the ellipses. (Just my opinion!)

2)My second differing opinion is that ending with that exclamation mark seems a little premature and ill fitting to the rest of the sonnet. In the rest of the poem you are searching, pleading, questioning and then you are again enchanted by the "sultry touch" of the sonnet. It does end on a positive note but I'm not sure that it's quite excitement. The speaker doesn't suddenly feel the touch but they "seem" to feel it.

2.5) Another punctuation comment I have is that I'm not sure all three question marks are quite necessary, just something to consider as they are a little distracting and you really only need the 3rd one. They do help to separate each line though.

2.75)Just caught another punctuation comment: in line 7

"I plead, augur; sunder weal from wan woe"

XeNITe, hello, welcome to Young Writers Society, and thanks for following me! As soon as my number of followers and following are equal, I will follow you.

Thalia...muse...unrivaled grace...why did you leave me NOOOOOOO...well, that's about it! Byezeez!

Hehe, just kidding. Okay, I liked the vocabulary, but was the "thee" and "thine" and all that really necessary? Is this from the 1960s? Actually, I don't know when people said those old-timey words, just really. With those words, the whole thing seemed old, like it was written a hundred years ago. If you were going for that, okay, but that's not really my style. I had to define seventeen words to understand, and only then did I understand the slightest bit. Thalia. I know Percy Jackson isn't the best reference here, but were you going for Greek Mythology? Because it did say Muse, so I thought you meant the Ancient Greek one...

This was good, besides those totally unnecessary little nitpicks, and I think you have talent at sounding like a 98 year old man . Maybe try to sound younger? I think you might as well get the literary spotlight, you deserve it. Thanks for being online, have a wonderful time!

-wisegirl22