Hey Widdershins. I'm here to reply back the favor! You've helped a lot.
I like this poem. As a non-native English speaker, it eases my mind reading a simplistic poem. While I am not an expert of poetry, I can understand this poem... but maybe just the outer layer of it. All I can guess is that there are many symbolic meanings in it.
I do think the word "static" has double meaning here. I interpret this poem as the persona having a writer's block.
You describe the sound of the radio perfectly with "rain", but I don't get the "white noise". As far as I'm concern, white does not indicate any sound. Monotonous screeches, maybe? Eh, who am I to suggest changes of words, given the amateurish poet I am.
The persona sweeping the dust from the stars seems like she is removing the precious moments or ideas she has. Like a writer keeping their past awesome ideas as just that - past awesome ideas. I wonder how long it took you to come up with this imagery. I applaud you for this.
You keep all the stanzas have each line less syllables than the one before. It gives quite an impressive view and subtle intelligence on making it works.
Good job, anyway, hoping to see more simplistic poems coming from you.
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