A Single Spider

by WelcomingException

Published July 18, 2012

In Poetry

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A single spider 
like a lone wolf 
crawling beside the hearth 

A single dream 
a single light 
something close to re-birth

I sit there dreaming 
of the day 
when all my hopes 
will float away 

All that will be left 
is the spider and I 
wirh a noose around my neck
as I pretend to fly 
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Rainn
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Rainn wrote a review Review · Jul 18, 2012

Your rhyming is wonderfully done on this, WelcomingExeption. I like the flow and form of it, it reads well in my mind.

The only thing that disrupts the flow some is the last line of the second stanza. I think it is too long. Other than that, I think you did a nice job. Your story is okay, and I love the way that you ended it.

Overall, wonderful job.

~Rainn

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Nyanya
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Nyanya wrote a review Review · Jul 18, 2012

Wow. I like spiders! This is like an awesome version of the ITSY BITSY SPIDER!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I see what other stuff you wrote
"cry sweet child"
"dear husband."
"leave the world behind."



WHOOOAAA I BET THEY'RE ALL GOOD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!$
You could make $$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$. With this...... Oh I <3 it..... :) ;) :D :D :D
Oh it's cool.


Makes spiders everywhere happy!!!!!!!!


-Nyanya :D :p :D

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Bobbywalker
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Bobbywalker commented Comment · Jul 18, 2012

I love it. I don't know why, but i really love it :)



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