Young Writers Society

Hi, this is ZeldaIsShiek, here to review another amazing piece of literacy and beat the Werewolves once and for all! For the Witches shall win in the end! But before that happens, I am going to help you improve your writing as a whole and improve you as a Young Writer in the process. Of this I am certain. I like all literacy, regardless of what genre or subject it is falls under. I really like your profile picture, by the way! I can not wait to review this piece of art When I review your work, this will become apparent to you. Sorry for the long intro, but it's my first time reading your poetry. Are you ready to start? Let's begin the review!

What I really liked about this poem was the idea of the poet being in love with someone that was not meant for them. Though I am an aromantic person, I do enjoy a good love story that is filled with meaning and expressive words. I am filled with joy at the sight of your creativity when it comes to your poem, and I will like and follow you in order to continue reading your works. One of my favorite lines was "I hoped this feeling would be gone," because ideas like this one seem to be used so much in poetry that it seems almost impossible to distinguish it from another poem. This is a good thing, because it creates a fluent and fast-paced story within the poem itself.

Sorry that my review was so short, but I'm pressed for time at the moment. Keep writing, and remember to have fun doing it! ZeldaIsShiek- Out!

Hello, E.E here for a possibly quick review and maybe some utter nonsense! Grim is here as well, drinking hot cocoa and being a slacker. *Grim looks over, glaring* So, lets get started.

So, first thing I notice is that a line or two is missing a comma. Those/that line would be "Since I met you I don’t know,". A comma is needed after the word "you". A few places are in need of spelling errors. Those places would be "We’re not yet for each other,". It should be "We are not meant for each other." That would flow much better.

Now is when I dissect your poem and see if I can't get its meaning right! So, in your poem you are telling us, the reader, about how you love some one, the simple and big things. But you know, deep down, that its just not possible. Either its because of religion or something smaller, it kills you to know that it just won't happen.

Overall I loved the poem and keep up the good work! Happy Halloween! I really need to go now Grim has souls to reap and he needs more cocoa. He has a problem, seriously. Cheerio and fruit loops to you!

Hello WeirdoPotato! Kara here for a (hopefully) quick review!

Give me your soul.

With that aside, I'm not the best at poetry but here we go!

Bold = grammar and flow issues.
Italics = suggestions and overall
Strikethrough = remove
Underline = krazy Kara komments.

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First, let me commend you for including a metaphore and a simile which places this composition in the poetry category and not just prose organised into rhyme and stanzas.

I love those first four powerful lines:

"I don’t love it when you smile,

Your eyes are gone when you do,

Let me see your eyes for a while,

My feeling is a twirling tornado."