Flowers, swaying in the breeze
Flowers, always making me sneeze
Flowers, a lovely place for bees
Flowers, a favorite thing for me
When I read:“Flowers, always making me sneeze”For some reason, it made me visualise your avatar sneezing
Hello, Victoria! Welcome to YWS!Okay, this poem is short and sweet, and I especially liked how it rhymes and how you began each line with "Flowers". Since the poem is short, punctuation is not necessarily needed, but it would be welcomed.Once again, it's good to have you here!-Truly, MinganFollow your heart, and nothing will go wrong. (concerning writing)
Hey, there! I saw that others have been reviewing your work and thought I'd check it out. This is a cute little poem, and I like how the simplicity keeps a light feeling about it. Also, nature topics like these are really good for painting mental pictures with words. You've done well describing the topic - flowers - in a way that allows the reader to see it in the mind's eye. I like how you've chosen to rhyme your lines. Rhyming and structured form in poetry can be tricky to manage, so I commend you on this. Great job with the structured format and the consistent capitalization of the first letter on each line. One thing that I will offer a suggestion on is that you put end punctuation after your last line. I think it's cool how the narrator mentions that flowers make them sneeze, yet they still quickly conclude that they love flowers anyway. To me, it sort of evokes the concept of choosing to see and appreciate the beauty in all things. Great job with this poem! Keep up the good work! - Winny
Heya, just a short review for a short piece!
Flowers, a favorite thing for me
Hey Victoria!Wow! This is a nice little poem. I like how it's simple and not too deep. It's light, and an easy read. It's got a pretty smooth rhyme scheme as well. I like the repetition of the word "Flowers". It sort of gives an emphasis to the whole idea.I like the flow of the poem and the rhyme scheme, with "breeze" and "sneeze", and "bees" and "me".I like the images that you portray, with the swaying flowers, and a person sneezing( maybe they have pollen allergies??), and the busy buzzing bees.On the whole, I think it's a sweet little poem.Keep writing. <3
Hi VictoriaBarton! Im Anne here to review your beautiful little poem.I absolutely loved it, it created the scene of sitting in a green full of flowers in my mind, something I've been missing out from a long time. This poem reminds of the kind of peace nature can give you. When you just observe it. The repetition of flowers was so lovely and sweet. The rhyming scheme too was amazing, all but the last line. Don't mean to offend you, but 'me' didn't fit in the poem like the others. I'd suggest something like
Flowers, swaying in the breezeFlowers, a lovely place for beesFlowers, they never displease Flowers, always putting me at ease.
i found it really interinsting but kinda of shallow and maybe, just maybe try to do something that has a deeper meaning,as it is right now i genuinely think its something that my Phylosophy teacher would say,it kinda comes out a bit genereic compared to other poems that i saw but i really like the Innocent way the Poem is whritten,overall good work PS:sorry for sending 2 repeated comments i am new here
Simple,and Maybe a little to simple,try to do something more Complex or with a deeper meaning
Hey there Victoria! I talk about repetition a lot in my poetry reviews because it always has some kind of meaning. It could symbolize the general idea you want to showcase, it could add an effect that catches the attention of readers, or it could be something completely different. There are so many aspects of poetry, and all of it is beautiful to see because it's one of the closest points you can be to a person's vulnerability, depending on the attachment. I'm not really sure which one of those are what you went for, and it might even be under the category of the last bit. Since I can't give out specific commentary on one certain kind of repetition, I will just avoid that in the review because I want to give feedback that is helpful and not something that comes off as pushy or ignoring the actual work.Let's get into the review section now~
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