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Adrian had slammed his fist into the kitchen countertop hard enough to rattle the cups. Intel had flooded the streets overnight. The royal heirs were missing, and whatever fragile margin of safety they’d had vanished with them. Five days had passed since Jim, Adrian, and Lena left the rock behind, and now the meeting Adrian had organized with four of his commanders he’d identified on the Crimson Pulse document had become a risk. Secure channels were no longer secure. Everything was being watched.
Jim had also familiarised himself with his new home for the coming weeks. A room with four walls, one bed, one desk, one microwave oven, and one bathroom, all of it brown, blue, or some miserable combination of the two. It looked like a room Adrian would have chosen to stay in. And the view—how could he forget the view? He sat up and opened the blinds, revealing every visceral detail of the complex’s external drainage system. Charming, he thought, before promptly closing the blinds again.
There was a knock at the door.
“You up?”
Jim sighed. “Come.”
Lena opened the door and leaned against the frame.
Jim pulled his only set of pants and shirt from behind the door, smoothed out the creases, and shoved them into the press. “News? Or have you been commanded to be a good watchdog?”
Lena folded her arms, a scowl briefly crossing her face. “Nothing, really. Other than the streets crawling with even more feds.”
“So they haven’t found them yet,” Jim said. “And Arthur is getting desperate. If Adrian is going to make a move, it needs to be soon. We need that document from the databases. Fast.”
“Why don’t we wait for this to die down?” Lena asked. “What’s the rush?”
The press pinged. Jim pulled out his clothes, wisps of steam curling into the air. “Because if Intel doesn’t find the princes and the ‘part-timer,’ Arthur will mobilise someone far worse than the usual Intel nutjobs.”
“Like?” Lena pressed.
“I don’t know,” Jim said. “But Arthur is a very influential king. His reach extends well beyond Iassor, even beyond the Belt. He’ll find someone smarter, faster, stronger—and God help us if we run into them while raiding the centre of information in Iassor.”
“You think he’d pull someone from another sector just for this?”
Jim looked at her. “Right now, Lena, Arthur isn’t a king. He’s a father who just lost his children. Children he would move mountains for.”
Lena grimaced. “Fair point.”
Jim slid his cup under the coffee machine. He gestured toward her. “Want one?” he asked, raising his voice over the grinding beans.
She lifted a hand in polite refusal. “I’m just here to keep an eye on you while Adrian’s out.”
“At least fill me in on the plan,” Jim said. “I’m helping you raid a data centre. It would be nice to know which one.”
Lena hesitated, weighing the request. Then she opened a map of Iassor, several points marked across the rock. “These are known data centres. Most are underground and require manual access. No teleportation.”
“…But?” Jim prompted.
She waved her hand. The map reduced to three markers. “These are remote base stations. They house only the teleporters. The actual data centres are in orbit.”
“Archived data,” Jim said.
“Our document should be there,” she replied.
Jim scoffed. “That’s suicide. One way in, one way out. They could have a battalion waiting for us the moment we materialise.”
“One of the commanders has three contacts in senior Intel positions,” Lena said. She closed the map and pulled up three profiles. “She’s already convinced them to organise access to the base station.”
“She’s our way in.”
Lena nodded. “Adrian’s concern is timing—and what the requirements will be.”
Jim took a sip of coffee and winced at the bitterness, quickly reaching for the sugar. “It’ll still be rough. Every data centre has a double authentication process. Even with thin security, we still have to pass it.”
“And that is?”
“Check-in at the base station. Scan and transmission. Materialise at the orbital station. Check-out. Channel integrity scan.” He ticked each step off on his fingers. “Base station’s easy. The problem is the other side. Best option is assuming the identities of the guards we neutralise and stealing their access keys. But our IDs vanish the moment we step into the teleporter.”
“We’ll be flagged at check-out,” Lena said.
Jim nodded. “The only way in is legitimate access under our names, with our biometrics.” He leaned back. “And guess who doesn’t exist?”
Lena studied him. “Based on your tone, I’m guessing you’ve tried this before.”
“Tried,” Jim said. “Lasted a couple of weeks before they sold me out.” He waved his link. “How do you think I copied the document?”
“A shitty copy,” Lena muttered.
“A copy nonetheless,” Jim shot back. “And I’d wager this same conversation is happening right now between Adrian and his four henchmen—each one a walking weapon.”
“Your point?”
“I don’t think that meeting is just about the raid,” Jim said. “If it were, he’d have no problem bringing me along. It would actually help him. Instead, you’re here watching me, which means whatever he’s discussing is something he doesn’t want me to hear.”
He paused, watching her closely. Her expression barely changed, but her arms, once folded, now rested a little closer to her holster.
Jim pressed on.
“I never bought your story that all of SEKT went on to live quiet, middle-income lives, only to be reactivated years later like some dormant parasite. Keeping thousands of rebels silent about a cause they’d die for is impossible. People talk. There would’ve been rumours, conspiracies. But there was nothing. Which leaves one conclusion: SEKT operatives—and maybe their families—were exiled somewhere outside Beltian society. Another planet, another system, an uninhabited rock. Either way, they weren’t Iassorian citizens.”
“Where are you going with this?” Lena asked.
Jim chose his words carefully. “What makes you special?”
“Special?”
“You were part of Adrian’s inner circle. A commander. The one person Arthur should’ve locked away. And yet you built a life—a political activist, a businesswoman, a loyal member of a weekly book club.” His voice hardened. “Why do you walk free? What made you stay quiet?”
Lena paused. Then she pulled a small remote from her pocket and pressed a button. The faint hum of the cameras died. Jim leaned back and opened his arms, inviting her to sit.
“Before the war,” Lena said, “Arthur’s father, Tirius, had an affair with an Iassorian commoner. I am her daughter.”
Jim stared. That made her Arthur’s stepsister. “So you have royal blood.”
She nodded. “And more. Tirius discovered something about my mother that would have changed human history. When the Belt tried to weaponise Secronium, they learned the founders had passed down their enhancements genetically. Resistance to Secronium was hereditary. My mother was a descendant.”
“The founders,” Jim said quietly. “The original colonists.”
She nodded again. “As the Belt expanded, the gene pool diluted. But the dominant trait remained.”
“So the Sec-user program…”
“Was the result of experimentation on my mother,” Lena said. “Three months after my birth, she died, succumbing to the wounds during the experimentation. I grew up in an orphanage.”
Jim exhaled slowly. “So you’re the most pure-blooded SEKT agent there ever was. And you weren’t enhanced.” His mind raced. “Then why join the Alliance?”
“When Arthur took the throne, he inherited his father’s secrets,” Lena said. “He came to the orphanage to speak with me. Offered me a place within the castle walls. Knowing what his father did made me want nothing to do with it. The Alliance gave me distance while still serving Iassor. That was before SEKT split.”
“After the war?” Jim asked.
“He spared me,” she said.
“Why?”
She shrugged. “Family, I suppose. Feeling partly responsible for the atrocities his father committed.” Her mouth tightened. “He wiped my memory, though. Nice way to keep me silent.”
“All of it?”
“I don’t know. When I recovered, I had a directive to go to the Southern Outskirts. That’s where I found Adrian.”
“And you compared notes.”
She nodded. “Fragments came back. Disjointed. The same happened to him. We all carry broken memories of that massacre.”
“And you never tried to dig deeper?” Jim asked. “I find that hard to believe.”
Lena threw her hands up. “Who the fuck cared? Everyone told the same story. Life went on. There was peace. Political tensions settled.” Her voice softened. “So did I.”
Jim noticed her fingers drift toward her bare left hand. “Married?” he asked. “Once married?”
Her expression hardened. She shoved the chair back and stood. “We’re done,” she said, though her voice trembled.
“Lena, wait—”
The door slammed.
Jim swore under his breath. The question had been stupid. Whatever the answer, it wouldn’t have helped. He leaned back and stared at the ceiling.
Despite it all, he felt a flicker of satisfaction. Lena might be the closest thing he had to an ally. She wasn’t militant anymore—just scarred. And he’d bet the only thousand-dollar bill he owned that she was here for the same reason he was.
The truth.
Jim’s gaze hardened. The data centre was a distraction. The truth he wanted wasn’t stored in orbit—it was sitting a few doors down. Though Lena’s demeanour had softened throughout their conversation, the revelation that Lena had royal blood spelled something much larger than a revitalized rebellion and a calm, diplomatic discussion with Arthur. He sensed that Lena wanted nothing to do with the royal family and its accompanying demons but given her unique lineage, Adrian may not give her a choice.
He needed to find the missing heirs before Adrian, Lena or SEKT did.
His door swung open, Adrian standing at the door. “The ship will be ready by sundown. Prepare to leave within the hour.”
Wait? A ship? A spaceship?! What the fuck happened in that meeting?
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I find this part of the sentence very hard to understand. So Adrian’s commanders were on the Crimson Pulse document which is why he wanted to speak with them abt the security breach… Right? But bc of the vanishing heirs that meeting is now in danger…I remember this story, and it’s good that you finally posted another chapter ^^ Finally came up in my Green Room random generator!
Since your last chapter has been almost a year ago, it might have been a good idea to give a small plot summary in the beginning.
I stumble over the confusing pronoun usage here. Maybe it would have been better to have a single sentence about the Crimson Pulse document and what kinda commanders where in there and why they are important before having another sentence abt why the meeting is no longer a good idea?
“revealing every visceral detail of the complex’s external drainage system. “ hahahaha!
Hmm is it rly okay to only say “Come” instead of “Come in”?
…why were his clothes “behind the door”? Did he just thrown them down after removing them and when Lena opened the door, she kinda… accidentally pushed them across the floor? Also I was always curious what it means when you shove clothes into the press. Is this common or high-tech?
Oh I am getting excited just reading these two discuss the plan. I like it! And I like how nice the conversation flows with just enough background details to keep the situation grounded!
Ohhh I also like how you reveal this part of Lena’s back story (also can I just mention that you have a nice rhythm of using the names and the pronouns, now that the two of them are talking? It is all so very engaging and interesting to read!)
Hmmm did the evil scientists not know abt Lena despite having her mother in custody and doing horrible experiments on her? I find this part a bit … too unbelievable. That you would let your only test subject die like this. (Unless you have more than one of these ppl?) I am also unsure how they could have missed Lena. Maybe that will be revealed later. Waitwaitwait, they knew abt her and her being in the orphanage? Shouldn’t she have the same or at least similar blood to her mother, why not continue the experimentations with her? If someone is willing to let the test subject die, I doubt the next best thing being a literal child would be much of a hindrance… I am still confused and morbidly intrigued…
I really like the way their talk ended. I love how your characters behave :3
And I love the way the chapter ended. What a cliffhanger LOL
So I suppose we are no longer using teleportation to get up into orbit, huh? =D
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Hi Tikaya,
Thanks for the review! I'll definitely post a full summary of the events up to now in the next chapter. Currently working on that.
[quote]I find this part of the sentence very hard to understand. So Adrian%u2019s commanders were on the Crimson Pulse document which is why he wanted to speak with them abt the security breach%u2026 Right? But bc of the vanishing heirs that meeting is now in danger%u2026
I stumble over the confusing pronoun usage here. Maybe it would have been better to have a single sentence about the Crimson Pulse document and what kinda commanders where in there and why they are important before having another sentence abt why the meeting is no longer a good idea?[\quote]
You've got the idea but I agree the sentence is convoluted and confusing. I'll make sure to split it up for clarity in my edit. Also thank you for picking up the silly typo of "Come" rather than "Come in". It must've been late at night lol.
[quote]Hmmm did the evil scientists not know abt Lena despite having her mother in custody and doing horrible experiments on her? I find this part a bit %u2026 too unbelievable. That you would let your only test subject die like this[\quote]
Ahh, the experiments were genetic extraction. Once they had Lena's mother's strand they could use it to breed super soldiers that would become SEKT. Once they had one strand of data, they had no use for Lena because the strand could be cloned. I think clarifying what exactly the experiments were would resolve the confusion here and correct the inconsistencies.
Thank you again for the review and for sticking with this story despite being confused. I'll try my best to give a recap of events so far and the main plot threads that are running. I think I'll make the summaries a habit for each chapter considering my tendencies for a year-long hiatus.
-Reaper
Hello again Reaper!
It's been a while, and I've only skimmed the chapter right before this one to jog my memory on this story, so I'm just checking in whether I'm following everything you've intended with your writing. Here's what I gathered from this chapter: both Jim and Adrian ostensibly want to find out the truth about the Congo Massacre. Jim implies that Adrian might have a more "militant" plan for what he intends to do with that information, whereas Jim just wants to learn what is going on and maybe avoid fighting. He has a conversation with Lena where he learns that she may not have the same motivations as Adrian and therefore may be more on Jim's side (until he asks her an insensitive question). Based on the "Adrian may not give her a choice" line, Jim thinks that Adrian wants to use Lena's royal blood as leverage when they talk to Arthur. He also thinks that finding Arthur's children can prevent this from happening, so I'd reckon he is going to try and get out of doing Adrian's bidding (hacking the data centre) so he can do that instead.
(Also this might be a silly question, but is Lena the same character as Helena from Chapter 8? I've been assuming she was but I feel like this is the first chapter where she is called Lena in the narration.)
I remember I didn't like Jim very much when I was reading The Lie That Saved the World, but he's been growing on me in this story. I liked all the little details showing how he's a lot less suited to the hardened military lifestyle than the other characters: like his distaste for the bland, pragmatic building and for the bitter coffee. Him caring for Lena's well-being also seems pretty consistent for his character (if I'm right in thinking Lena = Helena).
The middle of the chapter feels very intellectual/analytic -- as Jim and Lena discuss her backstory I don't really get a huge sense that they are having strong feelings about it until this bit:
Before then, there's a little bit of description on how Lena is feeling but they both seem pretty stoic. I spent most of that scene trying to understand how the information fit in together rather than connecting to the characters, so the switch to a more emotionally-charged conversation felt a bit abrupt? I can easily see this scene working better if there was a bit more description in between the dialogue though.
I liked learning a bit more about Lena's backstory. So far, I think we've seen her be a competent soldier/rebel but we didn't really know much about her otherwise. I'm kind of curious to know what her interactions with Arthur will be like if they do end up talking. I also like how Troy's part of the story and Jim's/ Adrian's parts seem to be converging. The presence of more people from Intel adds an additional layer of threat, especially since Troy's last chapter where someone actually died.
Overall, I think this chapter contributes a bit to the arc of Adrian's 'descent into violence'. Lena and Jim are set up as foils to that, though I don't think we've seen Adrian actually start making big militant decisions (outside of backstory stuff and the soldiers he killed after Emily died). I'm guessing the meeting with Arthur might change that. I've tried to piece together some more bird's eye view feedback based on what I remember of the story (and checking back on some things where I could) but do let me know if you'd like more feedback on something specific!
All the best and keep writing!
-Lim
Hi Lim,
I know it's been a while but thank you for once again leaving a review. At the start of the next chapter, I plan to insert a small summary of the events so far. Considering how inconsistent I can be, I think I'll just make a summary for the previous chapter at the beginning of the current one.
Regarding Helena/Lena. Yes they are the same character. My intention was to make the conversation start off as stoic but transition to something a little more emotionally charged. I think adding that description between dialogue like you said will definitely help the transition.
Thank you again for the review
-Reaper