Hi there Valkyria
1. What did I like the most in the story Valkyria was that“Hi, Aunt Greta,” said Robert. His voice sounded breathless, and Greta heard noises in the background.
“Busy already?” she asked, sitting down and propping an elbow on the table. Robert chuckled, but it sounded strained.
“A group of hunters called 911 near Creek Falls,” said Robert. “They were in the woods hunting deer when they were charged by a moose, larger than any moose they’ve ever seen.”
“Was it white?” Greta asked sharply, sitting up.
“Y-yes. Aunt, you don’t think…?”
“The Specter Moose,” she said. “It’s got to be. I saw an ambulance go by my house,” she added. “Was anyone hurt?” Valkyria that was weird that what happened to Aunt Greta because it says in the story that she heard some noises in the background Valkyria you sure it wasn't Robert that did something to Aunt Greta because i think he had to do something to hurt her
2. What do I think needs to be improved Valkyria is that some your stories Valkyria remind me of a true story like this one but i know that is not exactly a true story but is so interesting Val i see that you did chapter 2 Val that's what i like about your story's Val you put so much fert into your work Val
3. what do I you think the story will continue Val is that coming up with story's Val takes time and i know that you took your time to find some characters and know what to say for this to be a chapter Val
Have fun writing!
Jay"
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