Young Writers Society

Oops sorry for that cause there was some mistakes.This poem is so good that I can't help reading it all over and over again. It has perfect rhythms an everything that a poem needs. Maybe you can be a successful poet when you grow up. Though your age is still unknown. I am trying to get as many points as I can because I can't really write anything with only 200 points. So please donate some points. And more about the poem. The poem was beautifully explained. And no grammatical mistakes or rhythm mistakes or any mistakes. Just a perfect poem. I don't really know about any people who think your poem is stupid because your poem is ok. No mistakes to me. And please donate some points. Thanks. :):):):):):):)

This poem was lacking in proper rhythm and the rhyme scheme felt weird to read, but it was a very good narrative. So this man watched his wife be raped and then they killed her. Or maybe she died emotionally. Regardless, she's dead and out of the picture. Then the husband finds them and kills them for what they did to his wife.
Me, personally, have always been terrified of rape. It is one of my biggest nightmares so this poem really touched me. It also disturbed me in a good way.
You have some punctuation and minor spelling and grammar errors, but it's tasteless to point those out.

What makes me smile , when I see them cry

It doesn't matter, cause they all deserve to die!!!

Oh wow. I recommend you put a mature content warning on this. Please.

Okay, now to the review.

First, I will tell you what I loved about this poem.
Great imagery. When I read this I can imagine it. That is very good :}

I also liked how you added a period after each stanza to separate them. It creates a very nice feel.

I did notice some grammatical errors, though. When you use commas, the space comes after, not before.

"Here I sat ,gazing the sky"

You switch tenses here. "Sat" is past-tense, and "gazing" is present-tense. I believe you meant to say, "I sit, gazing at the sky".

That is pretty much all :} You really need to put a mature content warning, though.

Good job! Keep writing,
~Rainn