Young Writers Society

Hi, Torres, thought I'd drop by for a review.

Well, this wasn't your typical "love" poem which I found interesting. It was about young love or first love that didn't work out in the end.

I absolutely enjoyed reading it. There was so much description like "riding the gentle breeze in the golden dream".

The only part I was sort of confused about was "Like anonymouse grass...". What did you mean by that?

Overall, I enjoyed reading this poem and am excited to see more that you come up with!

Signed,

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ANALYZING FADING:
Such a wow...romantic depicting the love which exists between those in a relationship.
We 'd say "I love you" acting like we understood everything.
This line of the poem shows that live us not buried in word but in actions an understanding. when one say I love you, such a person should have a proper understanding of what is being said. one might say u live you from the natural sense of brotherly love and then the other person may take it to be a serious thing, thinking that u really mean to say you love him or her.
"love and pains are forgotten in time
and falls asleep silently". Although love doesn't go with pains but there is a realm where the both can operate. Many may learn the pathway of love through pains while others may learn the pathway of pains through love.
"and we drifted apart due to our immaturity". In this, love can only grow and cause ascension when those in the relationship are both matured. Love is misunderstood when it is just a faction of sight and words. immaturity is a relationship.
"like dried flowers the day I 've spent with you
it is now fading in color". This is to buttress the point that when love fades, its fades out of immaturity. The day one understands the true efficacy of love, then that day love no longer fades.
Things fade when there is no way they can have effect around. When the real meaning of love is not depicted there is no way one can have a proper understanding of it. The concepts of love is flexible to those that understands it and rigid or fady to those who do not have an atom of understanding of it.

'Ello!

We’d say “I love you” acting like we understood everything

Whispering in beautiful stories we didn’t understand

We talked about tomorrow which seemed within grasp

Like anonymous grass beneath the bright sun

And we drifted apart due to our immaturity

Hey, Forever young here to provide a short review.

Ha ha. This is a great one. I found it quite similar to one of my poems and that is also the reason I liked it more. Whatever, it portrays love. It shows how one is seperated from the other and I think love can be understood more by separation.

Then, we tell us how love is fading with time. Love doesn't actually fade until you see something very bad in the person you love. It remains in every corner of our heart and sometimes it let us know its existence and that is when we cry for that person.

“Like dried flowers the days I’ve spent with you ”
Not sure but I think you should put a full stop after flowers.

Overall, it was awesome and I enjoyed reading it