A Necessary Parting

The grammer has already been mentioned, so I am just going to tell you that I liked this poem. This didn't really seem like a song lyric though because there is no chorus. It's just one long poem, but good nonetheless. I like the part where you said your heart was scarred from all of the beating..that was very unique and different.

Keep up the good work

I liked this poem. Sounds like something i would write.

I also loved the rhymes you had in it but the rythm was a little off beat. Maybe you should work on that too, to make the poem more agreeable to read.

And it was emotional too....But it does look like you wrote it in a rush! I think you could have maybe elaborated your feelings in this poem a little more?... -__-

Thank you very much i only had about 5 mins to type this from paper to type so it does have many issues! thank you for editing! It means a lot that people are interested

First off, I haven't reviewed in, like ever, so I'm a bit rusty. Card was right about the "I"s. So I think I'll just ignore the "I"s and hopefully you'll tend to those.

How do I keep my heart from feeling all this pain? (This is a question. And the first letter needed to be capitalized.)
From dropping the tears that want to fall like rain,

Physical scars from the beating of my heart,

Do not show the ones inside, not even a tenth part.

When you think that you have gotten away with it,

Just know, you haven't and it hurts me.

So, don't be surprised when karma finds you and you're all alone (It wasn’t necessary to capitalize “don’t”)
This isn't me being cruel; it's you reaping what you have sown. (A semicolon was supposed to be in place of that comma. A semicolon is used when there are two complete sentences and you want to put them together.)
Don't be afraid from what you have done,

Oh wait I’m talkin’ to myself again, (“I’m” is a contraction. So an apostrophe needs to be there.)
If I were you, I'd run.

You've hurt people without an apology, (without is a full word)
You don't have one friend who would say your eulogy.

Yet every time I see you, my heart melts,

It’s like a curse from within, my heart used to win. (“It’s” is also a contraction.)
Sometimes the most important thing is knowing who to trust,

Like a pane of glass, it is easy to bust.

Oh how blind I was! How angry I feel,

With your lying heart, I just cannot deal.

So goodbye forever, I promise myself,

True friends are my gold, true friends are my wealth.

This poem had grammar issues, there were a lot of lowercase I's in it. Which displays you were writing this quickly and with your heart and soul. Either that or you are very good actor. Every reader should be able to relate to the poem (that is over the age of ten). This poem was a good poem, CardDragon.