Can't Take It In

Hey there :3
Well, I have a big problem... I don't know where your trying to go with this poem at all. Like PixieStix said, you do need to break up the poem because it doesn't appeal to the reader if it is just one long thing.

1. "Where did that sunset go" What sunset? I mean, you are being WAY to broad. Poets don't use the broad theme anymore. Everything is specific and detailed. Everything has to not be broad... If you truly want to become a poet, you have to learn how to be more detailed with your writing.

Your style is still good, you have potential with all of it. You just need to fix a few things and this poem is wonderful! Again, you still are doing good. Don't get me wrong there. Just I asked my mom, who's a poet, to read this and that was her comments about it. Keep up the writing I'd love to read a lot more! Thank you so much for your time,
~Whitewolfpuppy

Hey, Pixie here to review. I haven't reviewed work in such a long time and i think that this peice actually has some potential in it.

I honestly believe that your not a bad writer. You use good words in poetry. I just have a little bit of suggestions that I think might you find helpfull in the future:

Maybe try to seperate the poetry? Like this? :

Where did that sunset go
1989?
I find it vashished
And I am here
Tying Knots
In brightly colored strings,
To set them flying;
I am here in the corner of the lakeshore
Seeing Japan through a hazy window
And trying to remember you.

That must have been a beautiful day -
Maybe I thought of you,

Though I wasn't here.
So much around me
Running through me;
Bubbles pop over the water from then,
As the people go by,
Not seeing the miracle.

The water can't reach me where I am ...
But neither can you.
This is all I can do,
And so many years ...
Clouds on the lake,
2013.