Hello there! I'm here to give a review on this first chapter of your story, Beautiful Pain. Sounds pretty good, but there are some things you can improve on.
But i'm not gonna put all of the bad stuff on you now, let's start with the good stuff.
- The whole premise of your description sounds different than most romance stories i heard of before, which is a good thing in my opinion since a lot are not so different in plot, mostly characters are more different. And by the first chapter, i can confirm that it's way different. I like it.
That's one thing i like, here's one thing you can improve on (i'm not saying your work isn't good enough.)
- It feels like everything goes by too fast, maybe add a scene where they go to the store and pay for the copy instead?
Overall, it's great and i will keep reading until the last chapter. (sounds pretty dumb. but that's how i feel...)
Points: 201
Reviews: 18
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